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People attend College or University for many different reasons [for example, new experience Career preparation, increased knowledge ] ..Why do you think people attend college or University . Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It’s commonly known that people attend university or college in order to get new experience, make career, and increase their knowledge. As we know, with no education, people are not able to overcome all the obstacles they might meet in the future life. In this essay I’d like to explain why people attend college or university.

Firstly, many people attend college or university in order to be an educated person, to get a diploma and then get well-paid jobs. In other words, they attend college or university to make their life better. Furthermore, Many people consider working in the most prestige jobs during the years of studying, To be clear, they try to get best jobs after graduation however. Let’s face it, If you don’t have any diploma or college degree, It’s hard to find high-paying jobs, this means you can’t make money easily. As a result, those who have no diploma or college degree have to work in dead-end jobs such as dish-washer, gardener, instead of working in banks , hotels, police agency and etc.

Secondly, To compare, according to some peoples’ words, even without education people can make a good career or own business , I think yes, It’s possible to get jobs or make a career or your own business as well, if you have enough capacity to make it. On the other hand, I think that, These kinds of careers or jobs and businesses have no point to make. I have two reasons for that. First, those who have never studied university or college courses are unable to think further about money-making jobs/businesses. Second, even if you make your own business, it’s not guaranteed that you’ll success forever, In other words, For one day, your business or other kinds of jobs you made may go belly-up once. However, If you studied at university and now you have a diploma and you work in a company, you will not go bankrupt.

Lastly, by attending university or college, each person will have a great chance to be familiar with any kind of unknown things. I mean, For example, After having graduated one-year course in university, you’ll have an opportunity to study in other countries over the world for some moths even a year, It’s adequate time to be familiar with other cultures or religions, and of course, to enhance your knowledge too . This is a great experience for everyone.

In conclusion, I‘d prefer to say that the amount of people that attend universities or colleges on behalf of themselves and their future life is increasing constantly. I strongly believe that, those who attend college or university will be the most successful, smartest people over the world. I feel that attending universities or colleges will benefit us more than anything else.