Toefl essay part 1 !

This is the article,

This is my answer.
The article states that to quit your job and open a small business it's better than to work in as a regular employee, and provides three reasons of support.
However the professor explains that there are drawbacks to open you own business, and contradicts each of the author's reasons/

First, the reading claims that there are many bureaucracies as an employee, however the professor says that, new business proses much more complicated, you need to take care about the business license, the loan, business plane, also if you break a partnership it's really big story for you, inasmuch there are more bureaucracy in your own business.

Second, the article posits that, it's more safety to have you own business. The professor contradict this point by saying that, In your own business you depend on yourself, and you can not be sick or take a day off, also he stats that, 75% of the new business are out of business after 6 month, so you do not have any protection in your own business.

Third, the reading says that; In own business the wage is higher. The professor opposes this point by explaining that, as an employee the company pays some of the health insurance, and pays a premium, as an owner of your own business you still have to pay your health insurance all by yourself.
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