Toam Ceramic Park

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I went to a ceramic park yesterday. There are a lot of loess dolls at the park.

I wrote about them. Could you read and correct them for me? Thank you very much.

We can meet singing clay dolls everywhere at Toam Ceramic Park.

Toam Seo Taweon made all these clay dolls. Toam is his pen name.

We call a clay doll ‘Tou’.

He describes his Tous like this

“I don’t want to hear so have no ears.

I don’t want to think so empty heads.

I will just sing a song. “

He was diagnosed a cancer in 1997. He rejected the cancer treatment and the surgery but fight against cancer by his own way, making these Tous. He expressed his mind through singing Tous with absentmindedness, Tous without ears, empty Tous.

I found a green smile Tou among them. It has stood on the spot for a long time then become part of nature. Its face is covered by green mosses. It still sings with green smile.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

I went to a ceramic park yesterday. There are a lot of loess dolls at the park. Idon't know what a ceramic park is, nor what a loess doll is. Did you spell 'loess' correctly?

I wrote about them. Could you read and correct them for me? Thank you very much. OK, I'll try.

I've suggested various changes. Please read carefully. I assume that Toam is still alive, so you can use present tense. If he died, use past tense about him.

I enjoyed reading this, you write with simple, clear thoughts.

Best wishes, Clive

We can encounter singing clay dolls everywhere at Toam Ceramic Park. Toam Seo Taweon, whose pen name is Toam, made all of them. We call a clay doll ‘Tou’. He describes his Tous like this.

“I don’t want to hear, so I have no ears.

I don’t want to think so I have an empty head.

I will just sing a song. “

He was diagnosed with cancer in 1997. He rejected treatment and surgery , but fights against cancer in his own way, making these Tous. He expressesd his mind through the singing Tous with absentmindedness<<< I don't understand your meaning here Tous without ears, empty Tous.

I found a green smiling Tou among them. It has stood on the same spot for a long time, and has become part of nature. Its face is covered by green moss. It still sings with a green smile.

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