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Enchantress Posted 7 years ago
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To my left and spotted a colossal human shadow

Please correct my sentences.

I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being loaded. I turned to my left and spotted a colossal human shadow that uttered "Get off my land". I squeaked and bolted.

  

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I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being pumped. " I squeaked and bolted. As a matter of style, I would delete "even".

— Anonymous

  • I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being pumped.
  • " I squeaked and bolted.
  • As a matter of style, I would delete "even".
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I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being pumped. I turned to my left and spotted a colossal human shadow that uttered "Get off my land." I squeaked and bolted.

As a matter of style, I would delete "even".

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