Time-management

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In life, we want to mature, we have to independented. How do we to independence? Independence has a lot of ways, but where is the most important way. My opinion, I think interpersonal communication is the most skill. Because when we contrac with someone, we can have a lot of learnings to that one and that like a finding information. Beside, things necessary for independent such as general housekeeping. It will help us have add many life skills more. So we can time management better. It helps us have healthy to management housework. Last but not least,  problem solving skill is very necessary for us because it will help us deal with difficult situations in our life. General, we need these skills to be independent. This life is our, so we need to go by ourselves.

Mr. Tom · Accepted Answer

What is your question, Anon?

Tom

Moonrise · Answer

I suppose that you want your text to be checked. I'm not really qualified for this, but generally speaking, there are some notes that I feel are obvious to me.

1- You seem as if you got lost. Basically, are you told to write about "Time management" or "How to become independent?" or "The relationship between being independent and time management"?

2-In my opinion, your writing is missing something called "Coherence". I suggest you look it up.

3- There are some positions where you didn't distinguish between a verb and a noun.

In life, we need to mature, we have to be independent. How do we become independent ~~to independence~~? Independence has a lot of ways, but ~~where~~ what is the most important way? In my opinion, I think interpersonal communication is the most important skill. Because when we interact with someone, we can ~~have a lot of learnings to that one and that like a finding information.~~ learn more, find new information, and exchange knowledge.

- I change "want" to need" in the beginning, because it fits better with the meaning of the next sentence.

- "independent" after "be" is an adjective.

- You asked "where is the most important way? then you answered by saying " I think ~ is the most important skill". Either keep it the same or change the first word. Moreover, I don't feel that I completely understand your point there, and in the rest of the paragraph, too. I suggest you consider the first three notes that I typed above.

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