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Rommel Posted 11 years ago
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This sentence of mine is okay, isn't it?
This sentence of mine is okay, isn't it?
I suddenly frowned when I realized that my dream of having kids wouldn’t come true without her.
Could I also rewrite it as I suddenly frowned when I realized the impossibility of having kids without her?
I suddenly frowned when I realized that my dream of having kids wouldn’t come true without her.
Could I also rewrite it as I suddenly frowned when I realized the impossibility of having kids without her?
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You can use either sentence, but they may not mean the same thing. It is not clear that they both refer to the same emotional situation. The first sentence sounds like you are yearning for her; the second one sounds like you are annoyed with her.
- You can use either sentence, but they may not mean the same thing.
- It is not clear that they both refer to the same emotional situation.
- The first sentence sounds like you are yearning for her; the second one sounds like you are annoyed with her.
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You can use either sentence, but they may not mean the same thing. It is not clear that they both refer to the same emotional situation. The first sentence sounds like you are yearning for her; the second one sounds like you are annoyed with her.
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Can I substitute upon realizing for when I realized? If I do so, would the sentence be grammatically correct?
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Yes, you can make that substitution.
By the way, although there is nothing wrong with the sentences, a more effective sentence would be to place the "frown" clause at the end:
When I realized/Upon realizing the impossibility of having kids without her, I suddenly frowned.
By the way, although there is nothing wrong with the sentences, a more effective sentence would be to place the "frown" clause at the end:
When I realized/Upon realizing the impossibility of having kids without her, I suddenly frowned.
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Doctor DBy the way, although there is nothing wrong with the sentences, a more effective sentence would be to place the "frown" clause at the end:When I realized/Upon realizing the impossibility of having kids without her, I suddenly frowned.But if I write When I realized/Upon realizing the impossibility of..., does this sentence still mean that I'm an
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None of the meaning or emotional side of it has changed. All it does is emphasize your reaction.
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