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Rpsh Posted 11 years ago
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This is the account of how all was in suspense, all calm, in silence; all motionless, still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.

This is the account of how all was in suspense, all calm, in silence; all motionless, still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.

Below is the sound edition of mine. Do you think so?

This is the account of how all was in suspense, all ( was in) calm, ( all was )in silence; all ( was in) motionless, ( all was in)still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.
  

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This is the account of how all was in suspense, all calm, in silence; all motionless, still, and the expanse of the sky was empty. Below is the sound edition of mine. Do you think so?

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  • This is the account of how all was in suspense, all calm, in silence; all motionless, still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.
  • Below is the sound edition of mine.
  • Do you think so?
  • There is nothing wrong with the original, except that it needs a comma instead of a semi-colon.
  • iIt is better than your version.
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This is the account of how all was in suspense, all calm, in silence; all motionless, still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.

Below is the sound edition of mine. Do you think so? There is nothing wrong with the original, except that it needs a comma instead of a semi-colon. iIt is better than your version.


This is the account of how a
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This is the account of how all was in suspense, all (was) calm, (all was) in silence; all (was) motionless, (all was) still, and the expanse of the sky was empty.
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Got it. The original version is concise and elegant, but my grammar is not OK... Thank you so much!
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Got it, thank you so much!
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