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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts indicate data on the electricity was produced by five type of fuels in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
At first glance it is clear that, coal production an Australia played an important role and nuclear power in France was by far being the most important source around twenty years shown.
Coal production was produced the most in 1980, it was a half of total production then it raised to three - fourth out of total. Whereas, at the beginning, nuclear power was produced about 20 units but in 2000, it declined sharply at 2 units.
Turing now to France, coal,oil and hydro power production remained stable in 1980 and 2000, while natural gas and nuclear power had a dramatically changed. Stared with a same production, after twenty years natural gas production rocketed into the first which was produced most about 126 units. But nuclear power production was decreased from 25 to 5 units.
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