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Anita_a Posted 21 years ago

This Is My Life

0 This is the life I live 02br
00I want the best in it 02br
00I want everyone I love to be in it 02br
00I want all loving people ever known in it 02br
00I want every human being with a heart in it 02br
00I want all the best loving people with a soul in it 02br
00This is the beautiful life I love and want to live forever in it. 0-
  

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0Me too, Anita, and so do most of us, and you have told us nothing new, nor done it in any new way. This makes a nice admission to your girlfriend at a slumber party, but it is not poetic. 0-

— Mister Micawber

  • 0Me too, Anita, and so do most of us, and you have told us nothing new, nor done it in any new way.
  • This makes a nice admission to your girlfriend at a slumber party, but it is not poetic.
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0Me too, Anita, and so do most of us, and you have told us nothing new, nor done it in any new way. This makes a nice admission to your girlfriend at a slumber party, but it is not poetic. 0-
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0 Mister Micawber, what do you call 'poetic'? 0-
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0 Thanks for your comment,Mister M. You sure are an encouragement for new poets!You sure know how to pull our spirits down! 0-
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0Hi Amandine, 02br
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00Poetry in the end is what we like, and criticism just tries to express what we like, where poetry tries to express what we feel. 02br
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00For starters, 'express what we feel' does not usually mean to simply blurt out our own inner emotions, which are at the same time very similar to and very uninteresting to others-- UNLESS the
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0 I'm sorry MM for being sarcastic earlier in the thread. 02br
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00I am thankful though that you took time to explain about poetic sense and criticism. I really appreciate it. I'll try to improve my poems in future. 02br
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00But you know mister M, I always believe very strongly, being a ESL teacher myself that positive criticism brings better resul
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0 I was actually trying out a new form with redundant words but the lenghth of the lines and syllables increasing in each line... now I know that it didn't work out as expected. Thanks for pointing out the mistakes in the poem, which of course is full of them! 0-
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0 It's a pretty nice piece of work and I appreciate your attitude towards life......you know....there are so many people comit suicide........nowadays in the world.... 0-
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But you know mister M, I always believe very strongly, being a ESL teacher myself that positive criticism brings better results tham negative criticism as it boosts one's confidence. Of course, everyone to their own opinion.
I'm an ESL speaker myself, and I've found both positive and negative criticism helpful in my learning experience. Too much positives can make me qui
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