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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
This is my first poem. Correction please. Thanks :)
I wish I could write
A few words to calm myself down
A few lines to lessen the fright
Of living in this dark room
And spending alone the whole night
I wonder why it's so hard
To find inspiration in this world full of lights
Then I think I'm not old enough
Or maybe my mind's not that bright
I always fail to understand
Why am I still alive?
A few words to calm myself down
A few lines to lessen the fright
Of living in this dark room
And spending alone the whole night
I wonder why it's so hard
To find inspiration in this world full of lights
Then I think I'm not old enough
Or maybe my mind's not that bright
I always fail to understand
Why am I still alive?
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Hi, that's a lovely poem. ''
- Hi, that's a lovely poem.
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Hi, that's a lovely poem. Just one suggestion for line 5; I thought it might sound better if you wrote And spending the whole night alone instead of ''And spending alone the whole night.''
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