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Recently, I was overwhelmed with tons of homework at school so I couldn't often post my essays. But now, I have completed all my tasks. And I post again. Please help me review it. Thank you so much.The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The diagram illustrates how clothes are produced from plastic bottles.In general, there are 10 main steps in the procedure, commencing with collecting used plastic bottles and ending with finished clothing.At the beginning of the process, plastic bottles are gathered and delivered by truck to the manufacturing factories. Next, they are classified into different types and cut into pieces in a special funnel-shaped shredding machine. The following stage is that these pieces are put into the washing machine before being left in the sun to dry for at least 10 hours. The subsequent stage begins in the cylinder machine with boiling the resulting pieces which precede strain. After being strained, the byproduct becomes yarn which is ready to be weaved in fabric. Lastly, the finishing rolls of cloth with a variety of colors are used to sew items of clothing.

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The diagram illustrates how clothes are produced from plastic bottles.

In general, there are ten main steps in the procedure, commencing with collecting used plastic bottles and ending with finished clothing. (That is not a very good "main features" paragraph. You need to look at the "big picture" and make combinations.. There should be two or three of these "main features")

You only need one paragraph for the "details." There is only one paragraph topic.

At the beginning of the process, plastic bottles are gathered and delivered by truck to the manufacturing factories. Next, they are classified into different types and cut into pieces in a special funnel-shaped shredding machine. The following stage (How does the "stage" relate to the "ten steps"? The reader is confused.) is that these pieces are put ~~into the~~ through a washing process ~~machine~~ before being left in the sun to dry for at least 10 ten hours. (Do not start a new paragraph.)

The subsequent stage (How does the "stage" relate to the "ten steps"? The reader is confused.) begins in the cylinder machine (Not a good phrase) with boiling the resulting pieces which precede strain. (Poor English. A strain is a muscle injury. ) After being strained, the byproduct (wrong word. A byproduct is something that is produces, but not used for the end product. It may be used for other purposes.) becomes yarn which is ready to be weaved in fabric. Lastly, the finishing rolls (Not a good phrase) of cloth with a variety of colors are used to sew (Not a good word) items of clothing.

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