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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
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Hi, I was wondering if my thesis statement was strong enough.
Cultural myths not only help to develop our insights on values and beliefs that we as individuals use as a form of judgment but this judgment disables a person from understanding and accepting other cultural values that people from other countries bring thus leading to a conflict of barriers and giving each individual a personal identity.
Cultural myths not only help to develop our insights on values and beliefs that we as individuals use as a form of judgment but this judgment disables a person from understanding and accepting other cultural values that people from other countries bring thus leading to a conflict of barriers and giving each individual a personal identity.
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It is a bit long and blabby, and the persons change midstream. I also don't understand the last part. I have changed it to what I hope you intend: Cultural myths not only help form our values , beliefs and judgments, but also hinder us from understanding or accepting the values of other cultures .
- It is a bit long and blabby, and the persons change midstream.
- I also don't understand the last part.
- I have changed it to what I hope you intend: Cultural myths not only help form our values , beliefs and judgments, but also hinder us from understanding or accepting the values of other cultures .
- This leads to conflict and barriers to recognizing individual identities.
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It is a bit long and blabby, and the persons change midstream. I also don't understand the last part. I have changed it to what I hope you intend:
Cultural myths not only help form our values, beliefs and judgments, but also hinder us from understanding or accepting the values of other cultures. This leads to conflict and b
Cultural myths not only help form our values, beliefs and judgments, but also hinder us from understanding or accepting the values of other cultures. This leads to conflict and b
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