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Snarf Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
"Then" for smoothness.
She slowly moves in and kisses him on the lips. She moves her hand softly around his.
Should there be a "then" after the "she" of the second sentence, so that it says "she then moves...," or are those two sentences fine beside each other just the way they are?
Thanks.
Should there be a "then" after the "she" of the second sentence, so that it says "she then moves...," or are those two sentences fine beside each other just the way they are?
Thanks.
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Hi, 'Then' is not essential. Such matters are for the writer's judgement. To my mind, 'then' makes her sound more methodical.
- Hi, 'Then' is not essential.
- Such matters are for the writer's judgement.
- To my mind, 'then' makes her sound more methodical.
- Perhaps the writer did not want that.
- Clive
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Hi,
'Then' is not essential.
Such matters are for the writer's judgement. To my mind, 'then' makes her sound more methodical. Perhaps the writer did not want that.
Clive
'Then' is not essential.
Such matters are for the writer's judgement. To my mind, 'then' makes her sound more methodical. Perhaps the writer did not want that.
Clive
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Well, what if they were made into one sentence, like so?:
She slowly moves in and kisses him on the lips, then moves her hand softly around his.
Does that sound better and more lyrical?
She slowly moves in and kisses him on the lips, then moves her hand softly around his.
Does that sound better and more lyrical?
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Hi,
Well, what if they were made into one sentence, like so?:
She slowly moves in and kisses him on the lips, and then moves her hand softly around his
Some people will say you need to add 'and'.
Does that sound better and more lyrical?
Well, what if they were made into one sentence, like so?:
She slowly moves in and kisses him on the lips, and then moves her hand softly around his
Some people will say you need to add 'and'.
Does that sound better and more lyrical?
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