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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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We have all come to know John as a good man, so I am not convinced by your arguing that he himself, alone, without the aid of anyone else, was able to take all of our possessions in such little time. However, had he taken the items, do tell me, where would he have hidden them? From what I can see, there is no discernible hiding place big enough to hide them within without our noticing them. I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell them of them.

All of this just doesn't make sense, does it? Please rewrite it in better English, especially the last sentence.
  

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I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell them of them. I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell our people of my observations. All of this just doesn't make sense .

— Clive

  • I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell them of them.
  • I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell our people of my observations.
  • All of this just doesn't make sense .
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  • It doe s make sense .
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I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell them of them.

I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell our people of my o
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No I'm writing these sentences myself, but I haven't quite got the style right. Would it be OK to say:

I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, while mine are the most logical and are those which will be favoured among our people should I tell our people of them.

Or perhaps:

I, therefore, believe that your observations are incorrect, w
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Oh, I see. In that case, you are writing well.

I prefer the latter of your suggestions.
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Anonymoushe himself, alone, without the aid of anyone else, was able to take all of our possessions in such little time.
Does Clive think such and so are interchangeable and equally correct?
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No. 'Such' here adds to the archaic tone that the writer was striving for.


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