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BAYRAM ERDEM Posted 10 years ago
Vocabulary

The Tree of Life

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Could you please correct my paragraph below?

The Tree of Life is an ancient symbol dating back to the very beginning of the history of human existence and it symbolises the proverbial fountain of youth, with the promise of never-ending joy and happiness for me. I believe this tree bears the most aesthetic presentation of life energy in itself, and actually represents a common sense for anyone that loves to live and that finds joy in their everyday life. In this photo I loved the image of the tree because it has branches and boughs that grows (in a way) as if they are showing all the directions of the land..

The life of tree: Pleasingly too poetic, and almost a romantic name for a tree even!

  

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It contains too many redundancies. The Tree of Life is an ancient symbol dating back to the very beginnings of human history. It symbolises the proverbial fountain of youth and the promise of never-ending joy and happiness in life for everyone.

  • It contains too many redundancies.
  • The Tree of Life is an ancient symbol dating back to the very beginnings of human history.
  • It symbolises the proverbial fountain of youth and the promise of never-ending joy and happiness in life for everyone.
  • This tree is the most aesthetic representation of life energy.
  • I love its image in this photo because its branches grow as if they are indicating all the directions of the land.
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It contains too many redundancies.

The Tree of Life is an ancient symbol dating back to the very beginnings of human history. It symbolises the proverbial fountain of youth and the promise of never-ending joy and happiness in life for everyone. This tree is the most aesthetic representation of life energy. I love its image in this photo because its branches grow as if they are indicati

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