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Ashes4amber7 Posted 20 years ago
The Transition to Autumn
It's not very good in my oppinion, but its the only thing i have been able to write in 3 yrs so....tell me what you think.
The Transition to Autumn
By: Amber Caughlan
The nights grow colder,
And as they do,
The smell of autumn fills the air.
The leaves start falling,
In that glorious way only leaves can fall.
They are graceful, like little dancers.
The days get shorter,
And you can smell first frost in the distance.
The holidays are just around the corner.
The Transition to Autumn
By: Amber Caughlan
The nights grow colder,
And as they do,
The smell of autumn fills the air.
The leaves start falling,
In that glorious way only leaves can fall.
They are graceful, like little dancers.
The days get shorter,
And you can smell first frost in the distance.
The holidays are just around the corner.
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Not bad! I like it! ) You asked for comments, but I don't know anything about poetry.
- Not bad!
- I like it!
- ) You asked for comments, but I don't know anything about poetry.
- These are just my few cents: There isn't much connection between the last stanza and the ones before it.
- I suggest moving "you can smell first frost in the distance" up to the beginning.
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Not bad! I like it! (Isn't it great to pick up our pen and write once in a while?)
You asked for comments, but I don't know anything about poetry. These are just my few cents:
There isn't much connection between the last stanza and the ones before it. I suggest moving "you can smell first frost in the distance" up to the beginning. Once you've done that, you'll see it pretty
You asked for comments, but I don't know anything about poetry. These are just my few cents:
There isn't much connection between the last stanza and the ones before it. I suggest moving "you can smell first frost in the distance" up to the beginning. Once you've done that, you'll see it pretty
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By the way, where do you live?
From where I live, I don't expect frost any time soon, especially not with our global warming problems...
From where I live, I don't expect frost any time soon, especially not with our global warming problems...
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