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Peaceblinkfriend Posted 18 years ago
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"The Snow Goose...through a Canadian snow goose."
The Snow Goose is a classic short novella which tells the story of a secluded hunchback and the bond he forms with a young girl through a Canadian snow goose.
Just wondering if you think this sentence is too long. I am not sure how I should include the italicised part.
Thank you
PBF
Just wondering if you think this sentence is too long. I am not sure how I should include the italicised part.
Thank you
PBF
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I think it's structurally fine, PBF The only thing that bothers me is the repetition of 'snow goose"-- it makes the sentence somewhat tautological (I use that word in a loose sense). How about something like this: The Snow Goose is a classic short novella which tells the story of a secluded hunchback and the bond he forms with a young girl through an injured wild bird.
- I think it's structurally fine, PBF The only thing that bothers me is the repetition of 'snow goose"-- it makes the sentence somewhat tautological (I use that word in a loose sense).
- How about something like this: The Snow Goose is a classic short novella which tells the story of a secluded hunchback and the bond he forms with a young girl through an injured wild bird.
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I think it's structurally fine, PBF The only thing that bothers me is the repetition of 'snow goose"-- it makes the sentence somewhat tautological (I use that word in a loose sense). How about something like this:
The Snow Goose is a classic short novella which tells the story of a secluded hunchback and the bond he forms with a young girl through an injured wild bird.
I think it's structurally fine, PBF The only thing that bothers me is the repetition of 'snow goose"-- it makes the sentence somewhat tautological (I use that word in a loose sense). How about something like this:
The Snow Goose is a classic short novella which tells the story of a secluded hunchback and the bond he forms with a young girl through an injured wild bird.
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Thanks for replying Mister Micawber.
So you read the book
. Its such a touching story, right? I wonder if it was a popular
So you read the book
. Its such a touching story, right? I wonder if it was a popular00
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Yes, it is clear. The tale is popular reading and was also a well-received movie.'
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Yes, it is clear. The tale is popular reading and was also a well-received movie.'
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