The Screen Poem

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Poem-
The Screen
I think TVs really do somthing
to people.

I've been on a thousand flights before, when
the stewardesses get up to the show
the passengers how to save
their lives
(and then the people just look out the
windows, maybe at the engines or the sky, or at their

hands)

I was on a flight once when all that
stuff was prerecorded, put down on VHS
(The woman on the monitor was so
happy, helpful, and full of smiles)

Every eye in that cabin was glue to
the screen. They all watched the whole thing

I think the
airlines know: The screen is magic

Write a personal response to "The Screen". In your response, consider
- the idea the poem expresses about the power of television on the airline passengers.
-the word choices of the poet

- the extent to which you agree or disagree with the ideas presented in the poem.

- your personal experiences with television and flying, connecting them to the ideas in the poem.

- the strenght and effectiveness of your writer's voice.

My Response-

In the heavily technological influenced society, it is almost unheard of never having access to a cell phone, television, computer or any electronic device. Our society has grown to communicate through theses devices and to limit the use of human connection. As stated in the poem “The Screen”, the power of television is a vital aspect of capturing the attention of individuals. Individuals in are world are becoming more dependent on receiving all our vital information from a television source then from human interactions,in this case the stewardess. This way of receiving information had become so accustomed by many that the mind practically refuses to receive information another way.
The language Chiusano uses is very simple, but highly effective. He didn’t need to use extreme language or examples to support his message on loss human communication and the role that television. The simplicity of his language played the part of capturing the attention of readers in the most effective way possible. Even though in a situation where this information is potentially life saving, when presented in person the message is ignored and must be viewed on the screen in order to get the message across.
I fully agree with the message Chiusano is trying to convey. I believe our human interactions have decreased significantly due to electronic power houses. It is very similar to junior high and sitting in the classroom for endless hours with your teacher lecturing about some topic and majority of the students are tuning out. Though the moment they say, its time for a movie everyones attention perks up immediately. Ballets and theatre performances are becoming less attended due to cinemas with monstrous screens that are society is drawn too. Society piece by piece is becoming overpowered by these screens that seem to be with us everywhere.
I have personally seen this situation played out on an airline multiple times. I have had the privileged of both human and video safety features present to myself, and the attention given to each, is vastly different. Many passengers seem to be very intolerant, similar to a child when they must sit through a presented safety demonstration. The focus of the mind is thinking of everything that lies beyond the destination. Though put a smiling, beautiful stewardess on a television screen your good to go.
Our minds are becoming more reliant on electronic communication then anything else. Were becoming like bee’s attracted to honey, nothing else will do. Its sad to say that a screen and bright colours can fool are minds greatly.