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Max1985 Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
The real impetus ? Please rephrase.
Hi everyone!
I seek your help to correct the sentence below. Here's the sentence and a few points about it : "While my education has provided me with skill X, the real impetus for my goal comes from CompanyA, a startup that I co-founded while at UniversityABC and that I have nurtured over the past 2 years. "
1. I want to say the impetus comes from running CompanyA. Right now it says impetus comes from CompanyA. Which one is better? Any alternatives?
2. Is this grammatically correct "a startup that I co-founded while at UniversityABC and that I have nurtured over the past 2 years"
3. I want to use as less words as I can and be very clear. Can you help me rephrase this?
thanks,
Maximus
I seek your help to correct the sentence below. Here's the sentence and a few points about it : "While my education has provided me with skill X, the real impetus for my goal comes from CompanyA, a startup that I co-founded while at UniversityABC and that I have nurtured over the past 2 years. "
1. I want to say the impetus comes from running CompanyA. Right now it says impetus comes from CompanyA. Which one is better? Any alternatives?
2. Is this grammatically correct "a startup that I co-founded while at UniversityABC and that I have nurtured over the past 2 years"
3. I want to use as less words as I can and be very clear. Can you help me rephrase this?
thanks,
Maximus
Top answer
My education has provided me with skill X, and the impetus for my goal comes from operating Company A, a startup that I co-founded while at University ABC and nurtured over the past two years. 1. As above 2.
- My education has provided me with skill X, and the impetus for my goal comes from operating Company A, a startup that I co-founded while at University ABC and nurtured over the past two years.
- 1.
- As above 2.
- As above 3.
- As above, but I cannot judge more unless you insert A, X, and ABC (use fake names but the same word structure if you like).
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My education has provided me with skill X, and the impetus for my goal comes from operating Company A, a startup that I co-founded while at University ABC and nurtured over the past two years.
1. As above
2. As above
3. As above, but I cannot judge more unless you insert A, X, and ABC (use fake names but the same word structure
1. As above
2. As above
3. As above, but I cannot judge more unless you insert A, X, and ABC (use fake names but the same word structure
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Mister MicawberMy education has provided me with skill X, and the impetus for my goal comes from operating Company A, a startup that I co-founded while at University ABC and nurtured over the past two years. 1. As above2. As above3. As above, but I cannot judge more unless you insert A, X, and ABC (use fake names but the same word structure if you like). It would a
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The original sentence and my modification are both grammatically correct, but a skill is not an impetus, so the logic of your original falters.
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