The pros and cons of being famous.

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Many people argue that being famous might easily get more opportunity to strengthen the life. While there are some advantages to this trend, I am of the opinion that the drawbacks will likely be more significant.

On the one hand, the idea of being well-known can bring many positive aspects. The first advantage of this is influences, because famous people can talk about their quotes which easily receive supports than others, especially convincing everyone's improvement. For instance, Nguyen Phuc Thuy Tien - The Miss Grand International 2021, discussing about the world's peace and consequences of wars make a number of people approve of that. Those influent words creat affecrion to everyone.

Furthermore, being famous could create more conditions for the finance. This is due to many impacts from fans, viewers, especially followers on social media that make some advertisements, gameshow or talkshow invite well-known people to participate in their mission which not only help that company appeals more customers, but also get on well with famous people by giving a large amount of money.

On the other hand, this trend can highlight some bad effects. The first one is unprivate space caused by journalists and bloggers whose work is writing every trend to receive more caring, especially about well-known people. For instance, a relationship between a couple of actors or a tiktoker acted rudely to elderly. Consequently, famous people might not have free atmosphere to enjoy their own life.

On top of that, negative words cause the most serious drawback. This is because influential people can have some anties who don't support them. Those anties can comment, write blogs to body shame or speak scornfully to them. As a result, some startup famous people will be shocked at it and perhaps will have psychological problems.

In conclusion, this trend might express many benefits; nevertheless, I believe the cons of this trend is more vital. It is recommended that living in peace is mmuch greater than being famous without happiness.

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Many people argue that being famous might easily ~~get more opportunity to~~ lead to earning a large amount of money and building tremendous wealth. ~~strengthen the life~~. (That makes no sense at all.) While there are some advantages to this trend, (What trend? There is no trend mentioned here. A trend is something that is steadily rising or falling. ) I am of the opinion that the drawbacks will likely be more significant. (I cannot tell if this is a good thesis statement because you did not post the instructions.)

On the one hand, ~~the idea of~~ (The task is probably not an idea about something, but I cannot tell because you did not post the instructions.) being well-known can bring many benefits. ~~positive aspects.~~ (wrong phrase) The first one ~~advantage of this~~ is influences, because famous people can talk about their quotes (wrong word - a quote is what someone writes or says. For example, here is a quote by Shakespeare. "All the world's a stage, and and all the men and women merely players." People do not talk about their own quotes. That is not normal.) which easily receive supports (wrong form. Support is non-count.) than (wrong word) others, especially convincing everyone's improvement. (I do not know what you mean. ) For instance, Nguyen **** Thuy Tien - The Miss Grand International 2021, discussing (wrong usage) about the ~~world's~~ (wrong form) world peace and consequences of wars make a number of people approve of that. (That makes no sense. Do some people disapprove of peace? ) Those influent (wrong word) words creat affecrion (invalid words ) to everyone. (I cannot tell any benefit you have written about for being famous For example, famous people get wonderful invitations - for example, the get best seats at the World Cup finals or the Wimbledon Tennis final match.. Famous people can earn a large sum for a performance or speaking engagement. Famous people can get free designer clothes, shoes and watches from brand-name companies. They are good advertising for the brand. )

Furthermore, being famous often leads to great wealth. ~~could create more conditions for the finance~~. (That is not good English. ) This is due to their many ~~impacts from~~ fans, viewers, and especially the millions of followers on social media that make some advertisements, (wrong word) or gameshow or talkshow hosts to invite them ~~well-known people~~ to participate in their mission (wrong phrase - it makes no sense. A mission usually is reaching out to poor people. It also can be a statement of a company's grand long-term plan or objective.) which not only help (wrong form) that company appeals (wrong form and wrong usage.) more customers, but also get on well with famous people (nonsense. You have lost control of this run-on sentence. It now is so long an unwieldy, that it is incomprehensible.) by giving a large amount of money. (Put only one idea per sentence. This one has three or more ideas and the reader is completely lost.)

On the other hand, this trend (what trend are you writing about?) can ~~highlight~~ have some bad consequences. ~~effects~~. The first one is unprivate (invalid word ) space caused by journalists and bloggers whose work is writing every trend (wrong phrase - it makes no sense.) to receive more caring, (wrong word. Caring is like the love a mother has for a baby. ) especially about well-known people. For instance, a relationship between a couple of actors or a tiktoker acted (How can a relationship perform aan act? That makes no sense.) rudely to elderly. Consequently, famous people might not have free atmosphere (wrong word ) to enjoy their own life.

On top of that, negative words cause the most serious drawback. This is because influential people can have some anties (invalid word) who don't (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) support them. Those anties can comment, write blogs (ungrammatical series, missing conjunction bad grammar) to body shame or speak scornfully to them. As a result, some ~~startup~~ (wrong word) famous people will be shocked at it and perhaps will have psychological problems.

In conclusion, this trend might express (wrong word) many benefits; nevertheless, I believe the cons of this trend is (wrong verb form - ungrammatical ) more vital. ~~It is recommended that living in peace is mmuch greater than being famous without happiness.~~ (It is very uncommon for task 2 essay instructions to ask for a recommendation or solution. So this last sentence is likely off-topic. You did not post the instructions, so I might be wrong.)

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