The person I admire...it's short check it plz

0once i hear the word (Admire) I right away remeber him.The person who had sacrifiesed and gave without waiting for returns from anyone.The man who doesn't know what giving up or giving in mean,(My father).02br
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00My father was born in an extaordenary family which contains five sisters,four brothers,sick father and step-mother.02br
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00To be in such a big family and poor in the same time was totally not easy for him to contenue education, especially that he was the seconed youngest boy,so he has strarted thinking of a job to earn some money.hence, he started a small business which was to get used cars and sell them, as the pass away he wined up in his own exhibition.02br
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00Now a days he is a very important and well-known businessman in our city who sells leaseholds and estates.02br
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00I always wonder what would has happend if he did gave up in his youth life to his bad situation.02br
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00My father is a real example for the hardworking man.02br
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00(((((((am doing IELTS next year and my writing is weak ,,check it plz and give proposels)))))))0-