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the movie i watched- Silent Hill-1
hi, could anyone help me correct my poor writing? i'm a sophmore in Taiwan. the transfered exame is just around the corner in 2 months. i plead someone can guide me on my writing. thx anyway. ps. i divide the composition for 2 parts because i can't post the complete article in one time.
The movie I watched-Silent Hill
Expected by hundreds of thousands of fans for a long time, the movie “Silent Hill” finally emerges at every cinema in this month. This film is adapted by the popular video game”Silent Hill” as the same name. The plot in this movie also connects with the game Silent Hill I to III. When watching this film, the fans, experienced the video game version, can understand the plot much easier.
The story mainly tells a couple of parents fostered a girl, Sharon, the daughter of the witch, in the orphanage. Once again sleepwalking in murmurs “silent hill, home.” committed to suicide. For this reason, her mother, Ross, decided to drive Sharon to the “home” she mean, a ghost town burned out on fire 30 years ago, to discover her real background. Undergone a series of unexplained events, lost, Ross fight alone against a flood of monsters due to find her daughter back. As a result, Ross traded the demon a promise that demonstrated the innocence for Elisa, ’s really mother, a pathetic woman disgusted by residents, to the foolish residents, for her daughter. Though the mother and her lovely daughter end up gathering, Elisa, controlled by the evil demon, didn’t let them go instead of revenging the all on the spot except a weird woman, Elisa’s mother, for the pain she suffered in the past…
Besides, the special effect is very cool in this film, especially the screen of the demon with a huge sword showing, and countless bugs followed it. Chased by the demon, the actress in her all strength escaped from; meanwhile, the terror music played. It makes the audiences both feel frighten and nervous. I can say the music matches for the plot developing pretty well. In fact, some of the music even heritages the music in the games. Therefore, for some of the audiences, played the game version, may feel as they aren’t just watching a movie but playing a game
On the other hand, in order to find her daughter back, the actress picked herself up in high level of depression, and expressed the overwhelming bravery to face the terror. Her strong will is very respectable. This movie also shows the great love of mother to child. In spite of the fact that is not the really child for Ross, she didn’t care to find her daughter in high risk. It is the most impressive sentence showing on the movie “The mother is god in child’s eye.” After watching this film, I seem can understand why Ross said so, and realize how she loves her daughter so much.
To my disappointed, it is a little pity for this film that it doesn’t explain why the awful monsters show. Furthermore, it didn’t tell anything about the truth that Ross and Sharon all died in the end. Notwithstanding that the defects don’t matter to the entire. General speaking, Silent Hill is still a great movie no matter on the aspect of the special effect, music, actor’s performance skill, or the story. It does worthy to buy the tickets to the cinema, experiencing the terror of “Silent Hill”, and scream loudly as you like.
The movie I watched-Silent Hill
Expected by hundreds of thousands of fans for a long time, the movie “Silent Hill” finally emerges at every cinema in this month. This film is adapted by the popular video game”Silent Hill” as the same name. The plot in this movie also connects with the game Silent Hill I to III. When watching this film, the fans, experienced the video game version, can understand the plot much easier.
The story mainly tells a couple of parents fostered a girl, Sharon, the daughter of the witch, in the orphanage. Once again sleepwalking in murmurs “silent hill, home.” committed to suicide. For this reason, her mother, Ross, decided to drive Sharon to the “home” she mean, a ghost town burned out on fire 30 years ago, to discover her real background. Undergone a series of unexplained events, lost, Ross fight alone against a flood of monsters due to find her daughter back. As a result, Ross traded the demon a promise that demonstrated the innocence for Elisa, ’s really mother, a pathetic woman disgusted by residents, to the foolish residents, for her daughter. Though the mother and her lovely daughter end up gathering, Elisa, controlled by the evil demon, didn’t let them go instead of revenging the all on the spot except a weird woman, Elisa’s mother, for the pain she suffered in the past…
Besides, the special effect is very cool in this film, especially the screen of the demon with a huge sword showing, and countless bugs followed it. Chased by the demon, the actress in her all strength escaped from; meanwhile, the terror music played. It makes the audiences both feel frighten and nervous. I can say the music matches for the plot developing pretty well. In fact, some of the music even heritages the music in the games. Therefore, for some of the audiences, played the game version, may feel as they aren’t just watching a movie but playing a game
On the other hand, in order to find her daughter back, the actress picked herself up in high level of depression, and expressed the overwhelming bravery to face the terror. Her strong will is very respectable. This movie also shows the great love of mother to child. In spite of the fact that is not the really child for Ross, she didn’t care to find her daughter in high risk. It is the most impressive sentence showing on the movie “The mother is god in child’s eye.” After watching this film, I seem can understand why Ross said so, and realize how she loves her daughter so much.
To my disappointed, it is a little pity for this film that it doesn’t explain why the awful monsters show. Furthermore, it didn’t tell anything about the truth that Ross and Sharon all died in the end. Notwithstanding that the defects don’t matter to the entire. General speaking, Silent Hill is still a great movie no matter on the aspect of the special effect, music, actor’s performance skill, or the story. It does worthy to buy the tickets to the cinema, experiencing the terror of “Silent Hill”, and scream loudly as you like.
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Hi, I've highlighted your errors in red for you to look at again and fix. Style problems are highlighted in green. You also have about twice as many commas as you should so you need to go through and remove the unnecessary ones and find ways to make your writing clearer.
- Hi, I've highlighted your errors in red for you to look at again and fix.
- Style problems are highlighted in green.
- You also have about twice as many commas as you should so you need to go through and remove the unnecessary ones and find ways to make your writing clearer.
- A big problem is that you are mixing up too many tenses.
- The movie I watched-Silent Hill Expected by hundreds of thousands of fans for a long time, the movie “Silent Hill” finally emerges at every cinema in Taiwan this month.
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Hi, I've highlighted your errors in red for you to look at again and fix. Style problems are highlighted in green. You also have about twice as many commas as you should so you need to go through and remove the unnecessary ones and find ways to make your writing clearer. A big problem is that you are mixing up too many tenses.
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