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Ahsanulirfan Posted 6 years ago
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The main problem of us are that none of us has come here in this world on his own...

The main problem of us are that none of us has come here in this world on his own and we have freewill. Since we have freewill we can never live here in complete happiness and being sinless. If I believe that living in this world will make me commit sin that's why I shouldn't live here anymore and do what believe then I have to die. If I believe that despite believing that one shouldn't kill animals and plants for food, killing them is a crime and do what I should do according to my belief, then what I have to do is to starve to death. If I believe that my parents don't have any right to forbid me doing anything in my personal life because I wasn't born on my own and start living following my belief, then they can kick me out of the house. If I stop eating regularly or eat like just a little, gradually I will become week, my voice will become unclear, my face appearance will become worse and many more. If I believe that I have the right to take drugs, sleep with girls, drink, and do these things then I will become weak, and since we are humans, not robots, once we go into these things and get addicted, we hardly come out. If I believe that bringing children in this world is like put someone into a trap, so that's why I shouldn't give birth to a child and do what I believe, then I'll become alone in my old age, there will be no one to serve me in my old age. Suppose if ever this type of incident happens that I don't listen to anyone, that's why no one listen to me and one day someone kills me and no one is caring about me because I didn't use to listen to them. Hence it's important to listen to others so that they also listen to us. So There is no freedom in this world at all. If you have goals in your life and want to achieve them, you have to go against your mind and follow the customs of society. May the Almighty destroy the world very soon.

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