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Magnus Sciencefiction Posted 10 years ago
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The Lost Boy

Once, a boy wished to cross a street. He asked an elder for assistance. But he also added, " I hope I am not asking too much of you. And if I am , please leave my hand. I'll find others to hold."

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Magnus Sciencefiction Once, a boy wished to cross a street. This is extremely formal. Magnus Sciencefiction He asked an elder This is odd and unnatural.

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  • Magnus Sciencefiction Once, a boy wished to cross a street.
  • This is extremely formal.
  • Magnus Sciencefiction He asked an elder This is odd and unnatural.
  • It would be better to reword it.
  • You could write: an elderly person or, an old person .
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Magnus SciencefictionOnce, a boy wished to cross a street.
This is extremely formal.
Magnus SciencefictionHe asked an elder
This is odd and unnatural. It would be better to reword it. You could write: an elderly person or, an old person.
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Welcome to the forum, Magnus, Thank you for registering..
Magnus Sciencefiction " I hope I am not asking too much of you.
This is excessively formal in British English. We simply would not say it.
Do not leave a space after the opening quotation marks.
Magnus SciencefictionAnd if I am , please leave my hand. I'll find others to hold."
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