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Rainy day Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

The little boy

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the little boy

It was dark at night .when a little boy crossed the street .he went to the market.on his way to his home.He heard a strange voice.As if one is following him.he started to move faster.but he still hearing that voice.all of the sudden a shodow of a man appears to him from behind.He was frightened and scared.But he remembered his fathers word((do not be affraid my son ,for all things that will happen is nothing but a bad dream.the little boy swallowed his fear and rased up his head.when suddenly,a man came from no where and jumped at the little boy.In a quick move the boy picked a sharp knife from his bocket.he stabed the knife into the stranger's chest and killed him . the boy started to cry and cry .when an old man was near .he hugged the little boy and said'' do not fear my son for all the things that happened is nothing but a bad dream..
  

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Hi rainy day. Your punctuation is quite odd and you need to capitalize the start of each new sentence. You can also divide the story into paragraphs.

  • Hi rainy day.
  • Your punctuation is quite odd and you need to capitalize the start of each new sentence.
  • You can also divide the story into paragraphs.
  • Some of the sentences need a lot of work: a shodow of a man appears to him from behind You also need to check your spelling (bocket, raised, shodow) You quotation marks for someone's words, not ((.
  • Do you want to try to make those corrections and post again?
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Hi rainy day.

Your punctuation is quite odd and you need to capitalize the start of each new sentence. You can also divide the story into paragraphs.

Some of the sentences need a lot of work: a shodow of a man appears to him from behind

You also need to check your spelling (bocket, raised, shodow)

You quotation marks for someone's words, not ((.

Do you
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dear grammar geek

thanks for correcting my mistakes

I will try to make it more better

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