The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

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The line graph provides information about four different places of attraction in Brighton which were visited by travelers.

Overall, Brighton witnessed an upward trend in the proportion of visitors who went to Pier and Pavilion while there were a downward trend in the figure for Art Gallery and Festival.

In 1980, the percentage of tourists visiting Pier started at 10% which was the lowest point compared with the highest point of 30% in that of those visiting Festival. While there were a similar starting figure in the rate of travelers who visited Pavilion and Art Gallery.

During the 1980-2010 period, starting at 10% in 1980, the percentage of tourists visiting Pier went up and down gradually to over 20% which was higher than that of those visiting Art Gallery in 2010. The figure for Pavilion increased sharply to the highest point of 48% in 1995 before dropping to above 30% in 2010. Meanwhile, there was a minor fluctuation in the rate of tourists who come to Festival from 30% to 27% over the three decades.

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The line graph provides information about four different places of attraction

That is not what the graph shows. It does not provide information about the Art Gallery, such as the times it opens and closes, its location on a map, and what type of art it has. Also, you should list the names of the four attractions in the first paragraph. You must also give the time range in this paragraph.)

in Brighton which were visited by travelers. (Tourists)

Overall, Brighton witnessed (Do not use anthropomorphic verbs - "see, experience or witness" in Task 1. These are not appropriate for math or science writing.) an upward trend in the proportions There are two of these) of visitors who went to Pier and Pavilion while there were (wrong form) a downward trend ~~in the figure~~ (Avoid using "figure" in Task 1. A figure in this context means a table, diagram or graph inserted into the text. Only in very rare cases is it appropriate to mean a data value. ) for Art Gallery and Festival.

In 1980, the percentage of tourists visiting Pier, (10%) was the lowest of the four attractions. Festival had the highest, at 30%. ~~started at 10% which was the lowest point compared with the highest point of 30% in that of those visiting Festival.~~ While there were a similar starting figure in the rate (wrong word. There are no rates on the graph. There are percentages. ) of travelers (not a good synonym) who visited Pavilion and Art Gallery.

During the 1980-2010 period, starting at 10% in 1980, the percentage of tourists visiting Pier went up and down gradually to over 20% which was higher than that of those visiting Art Gallery in 2010. The figure for Pavilion increased sharply to the highest point of 48% in 1995 before dropping to above 30% (45% is above 30%. This is not precise enough.) in 2010. Meanwhile, there was a minor fluctuation (wrong word - variation) in the rate (wrong word ) of tourists who come (you need the past tense) to Festival from 30% to 27% over the three decades.

Vocabulary: Fluctuation.

Fluctuation is relatively rapid change relative to a trend line, or constant value. The following graphs illustrate the concept of fluctuation.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

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