The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

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The line chart represents the changes in the stock of Outokumpu companies in euros in the period 2006 to 2010.
The stock was up and down in frame time. The price of the stock was highest in 2007 and was lowest in 2008.
In January 2006, the stock was started by 13 euros. It was rising to January 2007 by 31 EUR, that was the major peak of the time frame. During that time, the stock was rising from 31 EUR to 13 EUR. After January 2007 to December 2008, the line was up and down from 31 EUR to 8 EUR. 8 EURin December 2008 was the minor peak of the line chart. The last period of January 2009 to December 2010, the stock was recovered and continued to rise until it reached a peak of EUR 17 in December 2010. It was a litter bit rise compere January 2006.

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The line chart represents (wrong word) the changes in the stock (wrong expression) of Outokumpu companies in euros in the period 2006 to 2010.
The stock was up and down in frame time. (wrong expression) The price of the stock was highest in 2007 and was lowest in 2008. (The opening paragraph should not mention any data values. Read my advice for Task 1 essays: IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice )

In January 2006, the stock was started by (wrong expression) 13 euros. It was rising to January 2007 by (wrong word) 31 EUR, (comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence ) that was the major peak of (wrong word) the time frame. During that time, the stock was rising from 31 EUR to 13 EUR. (wrong expression) After January 2007 to December 2008, the line (wrong word) was up and down from 31 EUR to 8 EUR. 8 (Never begin a sentence with a numeral ) EURin December 2008 was the minor peak of the line chart. The last period of January 2009 to December 2010, the stock was recovered (wrong verb form) and continued to rise until it reached a peak of EUR 17 in December 2010. It was a litter (wrong word. Litter is trash thrown in the street.) bit rise compere January 2006. (wrong expression)

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This is a line graph of the share prices of Outokumpu between January 2006 and December 2010. The prices are stated in euros.

Overall, the prices ranged from a high of about 31 euros to a low of 7 euros. There were two major peaks, one in early 2007 and one in mid-2008, and a minor peak in mid-2010. There was a three-month trough in late 2008 and early 2009.

Initially, the share price rose steeply from about 13 euro in January 2006 to its first peak at 31 euro in early 2007. After this peak, there was a decline, with variations of about 3 euro to about 21 euro in the first quarter of 2008, followed by a jump to the second peak of 30 euro in mid-2008. After this second peak, there was a near straight line drop to its lowest value of 7 euro in late 2008. The price recovered in the second quarter of 2009 and varied in the range between 12 and 17 euro to the end of 2010. The ending value was about the same as the initial value in 2006.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

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