The Last Paragraph of My Complaint Letter

I edited out approximately 93% of the part of my complaint letter that I posted in here around a week and a half ago. I had written it to kill time, and so I came up with stuff just for the sake of finding something to do. The same goes for this new material below ... however this time I think I did good (?). So I am hoping that someone can tell me which sentences aren't grammatically (sp) correct, where I need certain punctuation marks and anything else that may be wrong.

If he tells me that I have to work in order for me to be moral since not too many young
males in the history of the world who've reached legal age have just rested and had a ball,
that also means he was trying to guide me into making the leap that I don't have the right
to be unemployed by design since I'm not black. He was defending her for her negritude,
so since he therefore wouldn't have done this to Alton, Chris Stills, Scott, Donald et al.,
this can only mean that he was claiming that certain caucasians aren't masters of their
fate!! For example, Chris Dawn is my age. And he's black. Under the same
circumstances, Joel never would tell Chris Dawn that he's too underage to be purposely
out of work to keep the focus on fun and to take his rest and by doing that, he's upsetting
the natural order of things, it is socially unacceptable society does not tolerate it and nor
should Anne Marie, this means that Joel was calling me a child for me not being born
black.