The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph gives information about kinds of free time activities that elderly people in Europe do from 1980s to 2010s. Overall, the rate of hiking increased significantly. On the other hand, playing sport remained stablest compared to others.

In the period between 1980s and 1990s, all activities increased considerably, only theatre dropped sharply, from 50% in 1980s to 30% in 1990s. Among five activities, playing sport is the most common one with the rate of more 60%. Mean while, surfing the Internet is the lowest with only around under 10% of the graph.

Over the 20-year period, the rate of all five activities changed dramatically. In 2010s, the rate of hiking reached the highest point, at 80% and became the most popular activity, At the same time
, surfing the Internet also had an impressive increasing, from only 10% in 1990s to 50% in 2010s. Additionally, the fluctuation of reading can be noticed when it reached the lowest point, at 20% in 2000s but grew immediately in the next 10 years with the rate of 60%. Even though the percentage of playing sport decreased in 2010s but not remarkable and theatre was thought to be the most stable among five activities.

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The line graph gives information about (Vague. You should tell the reader exactly what is plotted on the graph.) kinds of free time activities that elderly people in Europe do (wrong tense. This information is in the past.) from 1980s to 2010s. (You violated a rule of paragraphing here. A paragraph has one main topic. You started by giving a description of the diagram. Then you changed topics to the information content in the next sentence. That is poor writing. It is important to follow paragraphing rules. You need a better description, such as how many activities are shown and what they are.)

Overall, the rate (There are no rates on this graph.) of hiking increased significantly. On the other hand, playing sport remained stablest (wrong form. You need the comparative with "more".) compared to others.

In the period between 1980s and 1990s, all activities increased considerably, only theatre (The reader is confused because you never mentioned theater as an activity.) dropped sharply, from 50% in 1980s to 30% in 1990s. Among the five (What are they?) activities, playing sport is the most common one with the rate (There are no rates on the graph. You need to explain what is plotted) of more 60%. Mean while, surfing the Internet is the lowest with only around under 10% of the graph. (wrong phrase. 10% of the graph is an area that covers only one tenth of the total area.)

Over the 20-year period, (1980-2010 is not 20 years) the rate of all five activities changed dramatically. In 2010s, the rate of hiking reached the highest point, at 80% and became the most popular activity, (wrong punctuation) At the same time, surfing the Internet also had an impressive increasing, (wrong form) from only 10% in 1990s to 50% in 2010s. Additionally, the fluctuation (wrong word. There are no fluctuations on this graph) of reading can be noticed when it reached the lowest point, at 20% in 2000s but grew immediately (wrong usage) in the next 10 years with the rate of 60%. (wrong expression. If it went from 20 to 60% in 10 years, it increased at a rate of 4% per year.) Even though the percentage of playing sport (wrong expression) decreased in 2010s but not remarkable (Do not write your opinions in Task 1) and theatre was thought to be (Report the actual data, not what people imagined.) the most stable among the five activities.

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Sample essay.

Paragraph #1: Describe the figure so that the reader can picture it in their mind.

The line graph plots the percentage of elderly people in Europe who participated in each of five different activities (reading, hiking, theatre, playing sport and surfing the internet) between 1980 and 2010. There is one data point for each activity given for each decade.

Paragraph #2: Select and report two or three of the main features

Overall, hiking and surfing the internet became much more popular but going to the theatre declined. There was a large spread of the data values at the first time point and that had narrowed considerably at the last time point. At the end of the period, four of these activities were enjoyed by half or more of these people, the exception being theatre. This compares with two (playing sport and theatre) at the beginning.

Paragraph #3: Report some details and make some comparisons

At the start of the period, playing sport dominated, with 60% participation. This was followed by attending theater, with 50%. Reading, hiking and surfing the internet had smaller levels, 30%, 20% and 5%, respectively. By the end of the period, hiking was the most popular activity with eight out of ten people. The greatest variability was for reading, which rose from 30 to 40 percent in the first decade, followed by a drop to 20% and then another steep increase to end at 60% in third place. Surfing the internet went up by a factor of ten, going from 5% to 50%, with most of the change (35%) coming in the final decade.

The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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