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Angliholic Posted 15 years ago
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The full body massage will consist of back, legs
The full body massage will consist of back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp (abdomen optional.) It is the ideal treatment for combating stress whilst alleviation muscular aches and pains and creating a sense of calm within.
Hi,
I ran across the above on a local website here, and it sounds not very good to my ears. Is it better to rewrite it as the following? Thanks for your correction in advance!
A full body massage consists of back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp. Abdomen is optional. It is the ideal treatment for combating stress by reducing muscular aches and pains, and therefore creating a sense of calmness within.
Hi,
I ran across the above on a local website here, and it sounds not very good to my ears. Is it better to rewrite it as the following? Thanks for your correction in advance!
A full body massage consists of back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp. Abdomen is optional. It is the ideal treatment for combating stress by reducing muscular aches and pains, and therefore creating a sense of calmness within.
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Angliholic it sounds not very good to my ears. (it doesn't sound very good to my ears) Angliholic Is it better to rewrite it as the following? Yes.
- Angliholic it sounds not very good to my ears.
- (it doesn't sound very good to my ears) Angliholic Is it better to rewrite it as the following?
- Yes.
- Yours is much better.
- CJ
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Angliholicit sounds not very good to my ears.(it doesn't sound very good to my ears)
AngliholicIs it better to rewrite it as the following?Yes. Yours is much better.
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Thanks, Jim, for the confirmation.
Is there anything to be desired in my version? If yes, please point out my mistakes.
Is there anything to be desired in my version? If yes, please point out my mistakes.
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A full body massage consists of back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp. Abdomen is optional. It is the ideal treatment for combating stress by reducing muscular aches and pains, and therefore creating a sense of calmness within.
A full body massage includes treatment for the back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp; treatment for the abdomen is opt
A full body massage includes treatment for the back, legs, shoulders, feet, arms, face, neck, and scalp; treatment for the abdomen is opt
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