the essay: new buildings should be built in the traditionial way?

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Some people think new buildings in cities and towns should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree?

Have you ever moved when you stand in a old house which existed several centuries? Have you ever felt sorry when you saw a traditional building was been destroyed to satisfy the demand of the real estate company? Have you ever seriously think about what the heritages ancestors left us but we did not treasured? If you have done above mentioned, you have to support my point of view - making new buildings in traditional style is a remarkable way to recover the losses what have already occured.

For one thing, traditional style is the product of the ancient civilization, it represents the history and culture of a community. The historian could find the details of the olden custom, the fiction writer could be inspired to create a story, the architect could acquire the wisdom from these construction.

For a second, human beings have made many mistakes in the process of the development, ruining the old buildings is one of these. For instance, when it comes to the 20th century, with the improvement of technology, some people claim that the old houses were not suitable to the requirements of the new age any more. Thus, a large number of projects of rebuilding made the city enter into the modernization. But when people were recalling their history, they found that there were nothing to prove what they had seen in the books.

For another, local tourism economy also could be boomed by the traditional style, it could attract lots of tourists from all over the world. People are curious about what the traditional buildings look like and what is the local custom in the olden times.

Finally, there are at least 2 method to solve the 'old buildings are not suitable to the modern life'. The first one is making the new buildings both have the features of traditional and modern styles -- traditional outside and fashion inside. The other one is dividing the city into two areas -- the ancient city and the .

In light of the above-mentioned facts, i would like to say that recovering the traditional style is a enormous way to let us remember the history and look into the future.

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