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Thedynamix Posted 18 years ago
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0 Hi guys, I;m up to the conclusion of a very long report. Need this section to hit the mark, with intent!02br
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00The aim of the project was to develop a content management system 00that would00 allow the School of Electronic, Communication and Electrical Engineering to create and manage their conference websites. 02br
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00The aim of the project was to develop a system for the school of Electronic, Communication and Electrical Engineering (ECEE) that would allow them to create and manage their conference websites without any coding experience. The chosen combination of ASP.NET and SQL allowed the majority of system requirements to be met, helping to steer the initial aim into a finished product.02br
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00How effective are these? Can any one reword it to greater effect? Thanks guys! 0-
  

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0 Your first example is simple enough to be understood by everyone (including me, and that's saying something). The second loses me, but only because I have the foggiest idea of what you're talking about in the second part. I looks sound, however.

— Philip

  • 0 Your first example is simple enough to be understood by everyone (including me, and that's saying something).
  • The second loses me, but only because I have the foggiest idea of what you're talking about in the second part.
  • I looks sound, however.
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0 Your first example is simple enough to be understood by everyone (including me, and that's saying something). The second loses me, but only because I have the foggiest idea of what you're talking about in the second part. I looks sound, however. 0-
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01cite10Thedynamix12cite10The aim of the project was to develop a system for the school of Electronic, Communication and Electrical Engineering (ECEE) that would allow them to create and manage their conference websites without any coding experience. The chosen combination of ASP.NET and SQL allowed the majority of system requirements to be met
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0Yeah I prefer the second one too, tbh.02br
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00I made some changes to it, please tell me what you think:02br
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00The aim of the project was to develop a system for the school of Electronic, Communication and Electrical Engineering (ECEE) that would allow them to create and manage their conference websites without any coding
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0Definitely change “helping to transform" to "transforming".0-
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0Thanks!02br
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00"Delegates are able to register to particular conferences01font01b00,02b02font00 and 01font00as per02font00 the specifications, the state of the registrations can be toggled"02br
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0"Delegates are able to register to particular conferences01b01span00,02span02b00 and 01span00per02span00 the specifications, the state of the registrations can be toggled"02br
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0 Thanks!! You were right about the other sentence, Itoally overlooked that.. Didn't really make sense.0-
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