The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and ttea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The bar chart illustrates the outcomes of a research held in five different towns of Australia about the number of individuals purchasing and consuming coffee and tea.
Overall, consuming rate of fresh coffee is relatively higher in Sydney as comp

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The given chart reveals the change in the percentage of residents who live in cities has buying and drinking habits coffee and tea in five different cities in Australian.
Overall, it is crystal clear that the percentage of people bought instant coffee in last four weeks rise steadily while the amount of citizens bought fresh coffee in last four weeks drop. city residents who went to a café for coffee or tea in last four weeks always highest point, compared with others.
The figure for a survey about citizens' coffee and tea that go to a café for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks in Melbourne reaches a peak at nearly 56%. By contrast, this data in Adelaide hit a bottom, stand at about 35%. Hobart is the second city which has the number of people went to a café for a drink made by coffee or tea in last four weeks, at around the same level of Melbourne.
There is a highest number of nearly 45% in the proportion of city residents in Sydney that bought fresh coffee in last four weeks. Brisbane and Adelaide witness a lowest point of about 35%. about people bought instant coffee in last four weeks, the percentage of urban residents in Hobart stand at nearly 55%, where the highest common compared with other cities in Australian.

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Minh Tâm 6791The ~~given~~ ( 1 ) chart ( 2) reveals ( 3) the change ( 4) in the percentage of residents who live in cities ( 5) has buying and drinking habits coffee and tea in five different cities in Australian. (6)

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2. What kind of chart is it? Is there one or more than one?

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4. Most of these graphs and charts plot numbers or percentage . They do not plot changes in values.

5. Your sentence goes very badly here. It is not a grammatical English sentence.

6. An Australian is a person from Australia. Australian is an adjective.( e.g. Australian cities are all located on the coast. ) You have not used it correctly.

Minh Tâm 6791it is crystal clear

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and ttea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The bar chart illustrates the outcomes of a research held in five different towns of Australia about the number of individuals purchasing and consuming coffee and tea.

Overall, consuming rate of fresh coffee is relatively higher in Sydney as compared to other cities. On the other hand, consumers of instant coffee are most in the city of Hobart. Whereas, Melbourne and Hobart’s people have similar habit of drinking tea or coffee by going to a café.

The information shows that in the city of Melbourne 64% people visited café for coffee and tea in last 28 days while Hobart slightly differs to it by 63%. In Sydney, people drank fresh coffee comparatively an increase at 44% in a month. The use of instant coffee was sharply rose at 53% in Brisbane as compared to others.

The figure demonstrates that Brisbane and Adelaide had the lowest level of consumer spending on fresh coffee over a month with 34% and 35% respectively. Although Sydney and Melbourne’s consumption substantially escalated compared to others. The purchase of instant coffee in Brisbane and Hobart had considerably higher rate at 53% and 54% correspondingly. Melbourne’s residents went to a café for coffee or tea, was recorded at 64% relatively higher than the other cities of Australia.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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