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Carlene Posted 15 years ago
Grammar
"THAT" is my problem. I need your help with this one.
I've found this on the Literary Section of the Newspaper. Is there something wrong with the sentence? I just want to make sure that it's correctly written.
I've watched the angel's playground envisage the conception of the spherical flame that has playful infants that illuminate the celestial ocean. I was so engrossed to see the birds dance wildly along with the rhythm of the angels' breath that I attempted to battle the apple that fell down from Newton's tree. I am a fool whose ambition is to have his name carved in Saturn.
Is the first sentence right? (I've underlined the part of the sentence that seems to bother me)
Please correct it if you notice some lapses from it and explicate it afterwards. Thank you..!!!
I've watched the angel's playground envisage the conception of the spherical flame that has playful infants that illuminate the celestial ocean. I was so engrossed to see the birds dance wildly along with the rhythm of the angels' breath that I attempted to battle the apple that fell down from Newton's tree. I am a fool whose ambition is to have his name carved in Saturn.
Is the first sentence right? (I've underlined the part of the sentence that seems to bother me)
Please correct it if you notice some lapses from it and explicate it afterwards. Thank you..!!!
Top answer
It appears to be grammatical. I'm not sure exactly how a playground would go about envisaging a conception, but the rest of it seems to work. Maybe you need to take a more imaginative approach.
- It appears to be grammatical.
- I'm not sure exactly how a playground would go about envisaging a conception, but the rest of it seems to work.
- Maybe you need to take a more imaginative approach.
- - A.
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It appears to be grammatical.
I'm not sure exactly how a playground would go about envisaging a conception, but the rest of it seems to work.
Maybe you need to take a more imaginative approach.
I'm not sure exactly how a playground would go about envisaging a conception, but the rest of it seems to work.
Maybe you need to take a more imaginative approach.
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Thank you very much for taking some time to respond to my query.
I think that the "Angel's playground" in the context is a syndechoche for clouds, and the "conception of the spherical flame" is a metaphor of sunrise. Do you notice how the clouds become calm and vivid when the sun rises? This is when the clouds are as though envisaging for the sun to arrive. I think that's what the writer
I think that the "Angel's playground" in the context is a syndechoche for clouds, and the "conception of the spherical flame" is a metaphor of sunrise. Do you notice how the clouds become calm and vivid when the sun rises? This is when the clouds are as though envisaging for the sun to arrive. I think that's what the writer
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carlene I think that's what the writer wants to emphasize when he had written it.Clearly, metaphors abound.
Can you say what specifically about the underlined portion was bothering you?
- A.
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