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Zach Boyer Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Tense Question for New Job
Hi, I have a prospective new job I'm applying to. The employer wants me to send an email saying "what sets me apart" from other applicants. I wrote a little story about a previous job experience. I just wanted to make sure I'm using the right tense throughout the paragraph. It seems a little confusing because I'm talking about the past tense but I keep saying "I WOULD do this …" and "then this WOULD happen …"
This is the whole paragraph:
What sets me apart from all the other applicants? This is the best way I can sum it up: I used to have a sales job going door-to-door. Our team would drive to a specific neighborhood. We were then supposed to go off on our own but stick to that one area. Then our supervisor would call us at the end of the day, ask our location and pick us up. But what I’d start doing … if I didn’t like this one area to which we were assigned (i.e., no one was making any sales) I would just kind of start walking … and walking … and walking. By the end of the day, my supervisor would call, he’d say, “Johnny, it’s time to go. Where are you?” I would usually have to ask a customer because I would walk so far I had no idea where I was anymore. So I’d say something like “Avon.” And he’d say “Avon? That’s 15 miles! How’d you get there?” And I’d say, “I don’t know—really because I’d literally be trying to figure it out myself—I just just started walking?” “Well how many customers did you sign?” And the answer would usually be 2-4 deals higher than anyone else’s total. In conclusion: I’ve always seemed to have this extra level of determination that exceeded that of those around me.
What tense should this be in? Does it sound right? I'm unsure …
This is the whole paragraph:
What sets me apart from all the other applicants? This is the best way I can sum it up: I used to have a sales job going door-to-door. Our team would drive to a specific neighborhood. We were then supposed to go off on our own but stick to that one area. Then our supervisor would call us at the end of the day, ask our location and pick us up. But what I’d start doing … if I didn’t like this one area to which we were assigned (i.e., no one was making any sales) I would just kind of start walking … and walking … and walking. By the end of the day, my supervisor would call, he’d say, “Johnny, it’s time to go. Where are you?” I would usually have to ask a customer because I would walk so far I had no idea where I was anymore. So I’d say something like “Avon.” And he’d say “Avon? That’s 15 miles! How’d you get there?” And I’d say, “I don’t know—really because I’d literally be trying to figure it out myself—I just just started walking?” “Well how many customers did you sign?” And the answer would usually be 2-4 deals higher than anyone else’s total. In conclusion: I’ve always seemed to have this extra level of determination that exceeded that of those around me.
What tense should this be in? Does it sound right? I'm unsure …
Top answer
"ask our location and pick us up" i don't think that it's a correct sentence. you should say: "he ask about our location to pick us up" or "he always ask about our location to pick us up" "he’d say" is wrong, use "he would say" instead of it. and change all "i'd" to "i would" because there is nothing called i'd .
- "ask our location and pick us up" i don't think that it's a correct sentence.
- you should say: "he ask about our location to pick us up" or "he always ask about our location to pick us up" "he’d say" is wrong, use "he would say" instead of it.
- and change all "i'd" to "i would" because there is nothing called i'd .
- i hope that i helped you enough,and good luck.
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"ask our location and pick us up" i don't think that it's a correct sentence. you should say: "he ask about our location to pick us up" or "he always ask about our location to pick us up"
"he’d say" is wrong, use "he would say" instead of it. and change all "i'd" to "i would" because there is nothing called i'd .
i hope that i helped you enough,and good luck.
"he’d say" is wrong, use "he would say" instead of it. and change all "i'd" to "i would" because there is nothing called i'd .
i hope that i helped you enough,and good luck.
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I don't think eth helped me that much. Thanks anyway eth. Does anybody else have any answers???
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I think your little story is far too long; I got bored halfway through. Tighten it up to a simpler narrative (and no quoted speeches) and re-post here. Then I'l check it.
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