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Give up the game sometime is easy, but sometime is extremely hard like drug. Gentle addiction can depend on player personal willpower to quit. For example, people who have strong willpower can give up drug by themselves, they don’t need any machines or any people help. They want to quit, they will be quit. For example, like smoking most people can quit by themselves. “Dr. Laura - the founder of Willpower Plus has personally used these very techniques to stop smoking” (How and Why does WillPowerPLUS+ Work?).

Some players don’t have strong willpower can call for help, like parent and friend. Parent and friend are very helpful to players who don’t have strong willpower because they can remind player when they play game. Also parent and friend can give gamer a lot of method to help them quit the game, sometime one person is not easy to quit. Because long period play MMORPG, it already stick into their mind.

High level addiction to MMORPG can cause players lose their personal willpower, and they wouldn’t listen to their parent or friend. The reason is their personal psychological already has problem. If themselves or parent feel about it, they may have to go to see a psychologist or psychiatrist, they can help players analyze their addiction level. They will depend on the addiction level to help person who are addict, also they will explain all the informations about addiction to player, and tell them how to control themselves.

In conclusion, nowadays MMORPG became more and more popular; parent may need to take serious about their child play MMORPG. If person who want to play game, just don’t play MMORPG game because don’t matter how you powerful in the game, at the last you will give up the game, and few days or months later you may go back play the game again or choose another MMORPG, that is a very horrible addiction effect. Also player should know that the better way to get their out the game is quit the game as early as they can.

Cwtch · Accepted Answer

Giving up ~~the game~~ (use the name of the game here. We need to know what it is. Later, you can call it the game because it eill be identified.) sometimes is easy, but sometimes it is extremely hard, like drug. ~~Gentle~~ (What is gentle addiction? It is like referring to ripping your arm off as a minor cut.) The severity of addiction ~~can~~ depends on a player's personal willpower ~~to quit~~. For example, people who have strong willpower can give up drugs by themselves; they don’t need any machines or any people help. They want to quit and they ~~will~~ simply be quit. For example, ~~like smoking most people~~ most pot smokers can quit by themselves. “Dr. Laura, the founder of Willpower Plus, has personally used these very techniques (what techniques? You can't say 'these techniques' without first identifying them.) to stop smoking.” (How and Why does WillPowerPLUS+ Work?).

Some players that don’t have strong willpower can call for help. ~~like~~ Parents and friends are a good source for help. Parents and friends are very helpful to players who don’t have strong willpower because they can remind players when they play game too much. Also, parents and friends can give gamers a lot of method to help them quit the game. Sometimes, ~~one person~~ it is not easy for a gamer to quit without help. Because long period play MMORPG (What is this? You must tell us what this is before you abbreviate it.)~~, it already stick into their mind.~~ becomes ingrained in the gamers mind and it is hard for them to re-enter reality. (I'm not sure if this is what you are trying to say. I took a guess.)

High level addiction to MMORPG can cause players lose their personal willpower, and they ~~wouldn’t~~ won't listen to their parents or friends. The reason is that their personal psychological already has problems. If ~~themselves~~ they or parents ~~feel~~ are concerned about it, they may have to go to see a psychologist or psychiatrist. ~~they~~ A psychologist or psychiatrist can help players analyze their addiction level. ~~They will depend on the addiction level to help person who are addict,~~ The psychologist or psychiatrist will determine the addiction level and treat the gamer accordingly. Also, they will explain ~~all~~ (No, not all, there is too much information to explain it all.) ~~the~~ ~~informations~~ (There is no plural of information. Also, explaining implies information so leave out that word.) about addiction to player and ~~tell~~ teach them how to control themselves.

In conclusion, nowadays MMORPG ~~became~~ is becoming more and more popular. Parents may need to take serious action about their child's ~~play~~ MMORPG playing. If person who want to play games, ~~just don’t~~ don't just play MMORPG games because ~~don’t~~ it doesn't matter how ~~you~~ powerful you are in the game, ~~at the last~~ in the end you will give up the game. ~~and~~ A few days or months later you may go back and play the game again or choose another MMORPG, that is ~~a very~~ the horrible effect of addiction. ~~effect.~~ Also, ("Finally," is a better choice for the conclusion.)players should know that the ~~better~~ best way to get ~~their~~ out of the game is to quit the game as early as they can.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

You have many mistakes, so let's work on it a little at one time. Please check for the correct use of plurals in your other paragraphs. Look at every noun, and ask yourself "Do I mean more than one?" If you mean more than one, then make the noun plural.
Also reveiw how to use articles - a, an, and the. Here is a video that may help.

1) Give up the game sometime is easy, but sometime is extremely hard like drug.
a) The subject of your sentence is apparently "Give up". But "give up" is a verb. A verb cannot be the subject of a sentence. Only a noun or pronoun can be the subject. However, you can make a noun from a verb using one of the verb's forms. Do you know what it is?
b) sometime means only one time. You mean more than one time, so it has to be a plural form.

c) a drug is not hard. The way you write this does not make sense. You have to put some words before "drug" to say what you mean.

2) Gentle addiction can depend on player personal willpower to quit.
a) The word "gentle" is not correct. An addiction never depends on willpower.
b) "Player" must be possessive, because the willpower belongs to him.

3) For example, people who have strong willpower can give up drug by themselves; they don’t need any machines or any people help.
Drug either must have the article "a drug", or be plural.

"people" must be plural and possessive.

4) If they want to quit, they will be quit.
"Will be" is not the correct form of the verb.

5) For example, like smoking most people can quit by themselves.
a) You repeat the same phrase, "for example" This is a new point, not another example.

b) I don't think you mean to say "smoking can quit". Smoking is an act of doing something, it is not a person.

“Dr. Laura - the founder of Willpower Plus has personally used these very techniques to stop smoking” (How and Why does WillPowerPLUS+ Work?).

6) Some players don’t have strong willpower can call for help, like a parent or a ~~and~~ friend.
Missing word in the underlined blank.

7) Parent and friend are very helpful to players who don’t have strong willpower because they can remind player when they play game. Also parent and friend can give gamer a lot of method to help them quit the game, sometime one person is not easy to quit. Because long period play MMORPG, it already stick into their mind.

Please check your plurals!!!! There are other problems in these sentences, but you must pay attention to the plurals first.
If you mean a single one, you have to precede the noun with an article, such as "the" or "a".

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MrPernickety · Answer

AlpheccaStarsAn interesting thing about this video: stop it at 6:44 and take a look at the top right hand corner of the blackboard, the sentense says "everyone knows what your talking about"

It seems to me that perhaps for some native speakers to draw a distinction between "your" and "you're" is about as difficult as for us, learners, to draw a distiction between "a" "the" and "zero article" ))))

BTW, this vid is only the tip of the iceberg, it deals with a very simple facet of the articles in English. The main obstacle is that for a great many cases there's no rule whatsoever that would govern them, and learners just have to learn these cases by heart (I file fixed expressions/idioms under this category)

AlpheccaStars · Answer

MrPernickety this vid is only the tip of the iceberg, it deals with a very simple facet of the articles in English.

Very true, but in this case, the poster has regularly left out articles, and could benefit from the basics.

The other video I considered had even more errors - it was also a basic introduction to articles, but the speaker omitted many articles in their talking about the subject!

Saintxiao · Answer

teacher plz check again

Giveing up the MMORPG sometimes it is easy, but sometime is extremely hard, like drug. The severity of addiction depends on a player’s personal willpower. For example, people who have strong willpower can give up drugs by themselves; they don’t need any machines or any people help. They want to quit and they simple quit. For example, like most pot somkers can quit by themselves. “Dr. Laura - the founder of Willpower Plus has personally used these very techniques to stop smoking” (How and Why does WillPowerPLUS+ Work?).

Some players that don’t have strong willpower can call for help. Parents and friends are a good source for help. Parents and friends are very helpful to players who don’t have strong willpower because they can remind players when they play game too much. Also, parents and friends can give gamers a lot of methods to help them quit the game. Sometimes, it is not easy for a gamer to quit without help. Because long period play MMORPG, it becomes ingrained in the gamers mind and it is hard for them to re-enter reality.

High level addiction to MMORPG can cause player lose their personal willpower, and they won’t listen to their parents or friends. The reason is that their personal psychological already has problems. If they or parents are concerned about it, they may have to go to see a psychologist or psychiatrist. A psychologist or psychiatrist can help player analyze their addiction level. The psychologist or psychiatrist will determine the addiction level and treat the gamer accordingly. Also, they will explain about addiction to player and teach them how to control themselves.

In conclusion, nowadays MMORPG is becoming more and more popular. Parents may need to take serious action about their child’s play MMORPG playing. If person who want to play games, don’t just play MMORPG game because it doesn’t matter how powerful you are in the game, in the end you will give up the game. A few days or months later you may go back and play the game again or choose another MMORPG, which is the horrible effect of addiction. Finally, players should know that the best way to get out of the game is to quit the game as early as they can.

Saintxiao · Answer

thanks for help teacher

Saintxiao · Answer

thank you teacher ...................

Cwtch · Answer

What is MMORPG? I know RPG is role playing game but what is the MMO?

Multi-media online?

Saintxiao · Answer

A massively multiplayer online game (also called MMOG or simply MMO)

Saintxiao · Answer

hello teacher would you plz check my other two paragraph plz thank you

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