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Topic: Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at 7 years old at least. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether children should be started to study their formal schooling as soon as possible. While some people argue that they should learn to begin at the age of seven. I firmly believe that it is better to be taught after 7 years old.

On the one hand, it is said that children who started studying lessons when they were only 3 or 4 years old have certain disadvantages. First, in the present, many parents bring their son or daughter go to learn outside like online learning platforms, so preschoolers can be felt pressured and stressed by their father. For example, in Viet Nam, according to Vietnamese Express that the figure out of children who begin their formal education when they study in kindergarten is about 70 percent, which is a large number. Second, they can not have a period to play something that they want at their leisure when they are too young because children spend time doing the homework or reading the next lesson what they study in tomorrow.

n the other hand, I support the idea that starting learning formal schooling at the right time brings more advantages to preschoolers. First, it can make their daughter or son feel comfortable and the brain of their will increase naturally. Second, it can affect to their health. To be specific, children do have not to spend a too long time on the desk, so it can be affected their spine. Moreover, it can help children not to be nearsighted in the future.

In conclusion, while there are many disagreements to the given problem, I strongly argue that they do not necessarily study early academic education when they study in kindergarten and the good time to start learning is 7 years old.