TASK 2_ EDUCATION_IELTS

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The computer is widely used in education and some people think that teachers will not play important roles in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree?In the modern world, the use of technology is increasing significantly. Growing technological impact can even be seen in the numerous fields, especially education. However, it is disagreed that technology will take the place of teachers in foreseeable future.There is no denying the fact that computers are essential in the educational field. Computers with connection to internet allow learners to explore a great world of knowledge, which is easy through basic computer skills. Wikipedia, for example, as a knowledge management system inclues a wide array of information both public and private, which you can receive a million results with relating keywords in extremely short time. Nevertheless, the problem is, the information that the computer often indicates from both reliable and unreliable source of knowledge, which leads to opting the information is difficult.However, artifical intelligences is unable to subtitute for the role of teacher in the classroom. Firstly, although students are provided many visual illustrations for the lesson by computer, it does not have emotions, which plays a vital role to aid student’s mental development. Meanwhile, teachers can realize both strengths and weakness of each pupils in order to adjust teaching methods to be more suitable, it is difficult for computer to do this task. By focusing on these, teachers can easily support their unsuccessful students improve study results. Secondly, by their own knowledge through practical experience or other resources, they teach not only acedamic subjects, but also many social skills, as way to support them having more job opportunities after graduation.In conclusion, computer is only as a learing of tools to help students approaching to lesson in the classrooms effectively, but will never overshadow the role of teacher.[281 words]Give me comments:LR: /9GR: /9CC: /9TA: /9

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The computer is widely used in education and some people think that teachers will not play important roles in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, the use of technology is increasing significantly. (The first sentence is off-topic. It is important to address the problem statement in your first paragraph.) Growing technological impact can even be seen in the numerous fields, especially education. (Not a natural sentence) However, it is disagreed that technology will take the place of teachers in foreseeable future. (The question is: Do you agree or disagree? We do not use the impersonal pronoun"it" to mean "you.")

~~There is no denying the fact that~~ (The previous words are extraneous. Just make your direct statement.) computers are essential in the educational field. Computers with connection to the internet allow learners with basic computer skills to easily explore a great world of knowledge~~, which is easy through basic computer skills.~~ Wikipedia, for example, as a knowledge management system inclues a wide array of information both public and private, (?? One does not have to log in to Wikipedia.) which (wrong word) you can receive a million results ~~with relating~~ related to your search terms or keywords in an extremely short time. Nevertheless, the problem is, (no comma) that the information that the computer often indicates (wrong word) from both reliable and unreliable source of knowledge, which leads to opting the information is difficult. (wrong verb, ungrammatical structure)

However, artifical intelligences (You have not mentioned this before. You need a transition to this subject, if you are going to bring it up. And you never follow up this topic, either.) is unable to subtitute for the role of teacher in the classroom. First, although students are provided (wrong form for this sentence. "can be provided") many visual illustrations for the lesson by a computer, it does not have emotions, which plays (wrong form) a vital role to aid the student’s mental development. Meanwhile, teachers can realize both strengths and weakness of each pupils in order to adjust teaching methods to be more suitable, it (comma splice error) is difficult for a computer to do this task. By focusing on these, teachers can easily support their unsuccessful students improve study results. (ungrammatical) Second, by their own knowledge through practical experience or other resources, they teach not only acedamic subjects, but also many social skills, as way to support them (ambiguous) having more job opportunities after graduation.

In conclusion, a computer is only as a learing of tools to help students approaching to lesson in the classrooms effectively, but will never supercede ~~overshadow~~ the role of the teacher.

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