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Hello,Kindly check and edit the vocabulary and grammar of my task 1, with many thanks. Practice: The line graph compares the price changes for 3 different foods with consumer price index from 1979 to 2009. Overall, all of 3 different foods and consumer price index increased moderately, but price of the fresh fruits and vegetables was higher than consumer price index and rapidly rised in most years.As is presented in the graphs, all of the lines was approximately  60 in 1979 and slightly increased in the period after. Eventhough, these price were also lower than the general consumer price index. After many minor fluctuations , the number for sugars and sweets reached the highest price with 200 in 2009 and the price of carbonated drinks with 150 in the same time.Price for fresh fruits and vegetables rose dramatically in whole the time, particularly after the 1989s. From the same time at the start of the period with 60, the number for fresh fruits and vegetables reached a peak with nearly 340 in 2009, growth to 280 in the period of 30 years.

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The line graph compares the relative price changes for 3 three (Do not use numerals for small numbers that are not data values. Use words.) different categories of foods with consumer price index from 1979 to 2009. (Incomplete. What are these categories?)

Overall, all of ~~3 different foods~~ the different indices and consumer price index increased moderately, but relative price of the category fresh fruits and vegetables was higher than consumer price index and rapidly rised in most years.

~~As is presented in the graphs,~~ (There is one graph, and the reader knows you are describing it. These words are useless and add nothing to the information.) all of the lines was (wrong form) approximately 60 in 1979 and slightly (incorrect. This was the period of highest inflation.) increased in the period after. (vague. Be precise) Eventhough, these price (wrong form) were also lower than the general consumer price index. After many minor fluctuations , (wrong word, spacing error) the number (wrong word) for sugars and sweets reached the highest price with 200 in 2009 and the price of (wrong expression) carbonated drinks with 150 in the same time.

Price (wrong form) for fresh fruits and vegetables rose dramatically in whole the time, (wrong expression) particularly after the 1989s. (Wrong form. There is only one year 1989. There are not two or three of them.) From the same time at the start of the period with 60, the number (wrong word ) for fresh fruits and vegetables reached a peak ~~with~~ of nearly 340 in 2009, growth to 280 (wrong expression) in the period of 30 years.

Note that all the lines cross in January 1983 at a value of 100. This is where the data for each commodity as well as the CPI is normalized. If the price index goes to 200, that means that it costs twice as much to buy the same item. For example, the prices of fresh fruits and vegetables were twice as high in 1994-1995 than they were in 1984. It also means that if you spent $2 to buy 2 kilos of fresh produce in 1984, you could buy only 1 kilo for $2 in 1994-1995.

The increase in CPI is called "inflation." The rate of inflation is the percentage increase in one year. In this graph the CPI went from 100 in 1983 to 210 in 2009. That is an increase of 110 over a period of 26 years, or an average rate of 4.25%. The inflation in produce was more than double the general inflation rate, at 8.8%

Example essay. This is much too long for a Task 1 essay, but it will give you some ideas on vocabulary, phrases, and simple calculations.

Paragraph 1: Describe the figure but not the data.

The line graph compares the relative price changes for three different categories of foods with consumer price index (CPI) from 1979 to 2009. The categories are fresh produce, sweets, and fizzy soft drinks.

Paragraph 2: Write two or three significant observations

Overall, all of the indices as well as the consumer price index had an upwards trend, but the increase for fresh fruits and vegetables was higher than the CPI and lower in the other two categories.

Paragraph 2: Write about some interesting details

In the initial period 1979 to 1983, inflation was quite high; prices went up by nearly two thirds from 60 to 100 over those four years. Between 1983 and 1987, inflation was relatively subdued; the CPI and indexes for two of the categories (sweets and drinks) was flat. The prices of fresh produce did increase about 15%. Between 1983 and 2009, the fresh produce prices increased at the highest rate, more than tripling (100 to 340). During that same period, the CPI went up by about 105%. The prices for fresh produce also showed more variation than the CPI. The category of carbonated drinks showed little change between 1991 and 1999 before resuming an upward trend, and growing from 120 to 150 in 2009.

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