TASK 1 - The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

MY ANSWER:

The Line graphs illustrate the number of students enrolled, international and local in Australian Universities from 2001 to 2010 on the basis of totals and commencing.

Overall, the number of enrollments of local students was much higher than overseas students. However, the commencing rates for both types of students were less than the total number of enrollments.

In the graph, it can be noticed that in 2001, 20000 foreign students applied to Australian Universities. In contrast, commencing numbers were slightly lower(i.e around 17000) than the total applied and for all the years. Also, it can be seen that for every three years there is a 20000 increase in the number of international students. In the case of commencing numbers, they were always less than students enrolled in each respective year, and quite interestingly about half of the students enrolled.

Coming to local students, it can be seen that commencing rates were always lower than the total enrolments and remained stable at 200000 with some fluctuations. However, the total number of applications was 400000 in 2001 and it increased rapidly to 600000 until 2007, when it remained constant over the end of the period.