Task 1 IELTS writing - please give me some feedback

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The charts compare the outcomes of research in an African Nation about major causes of the young’s phone usage from 2016 to 2019.

Overall, while social networks were the leading cause why the young generation use their phones, phone calls accounted for the lowest percentage of phone usage in total. Also, over 3 years, the rank of four categories almost remained the same.

In 2016, half of the people participating in the surveys said that social networks were their top priority for using their phones. The figure, for this reason, saw a slight drop by 2% in 2017 but began to rise again from 2018 to 2019, to 56%. By contrast, the percentage of people using email slightly fell from 25% in 2016 to only 19% in 2019.

With regards to digital cameras, in the first two years of the period, the figure for this remained the same, with 15%. However, by 2019, it increased by 5%. phone calls accounted for just a tenth of the total proportion of the average reasons in 2016 and by 2019, the figure, for this reason, made up only 5%.