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Mr. Tom Posted 16 years ago
Vocabulary

Talking of Shane and the scene he made at the restaurant that night,


Hi

Are these lines natural? Any suggestions are welcome.

(woman to her friend about her son)

Talking of Shane and the scene he made at the restaurant that night, I’d like to ask that while you might have viewed all the negative aspects of his last act, did you stop for a minute to consider the fact that he’s still very childish? I mean, a cunning boy like the son of my ex-colleague would have been very sly with such a situation,but Shane, given all the circumstances, wasn’t even careful.







Thanks,





Tom
  

Top answer

Too formal, trying to squeeze too much into one sentence. Haven't you already mentioned the incident in the preceding text? If so: Shane may have looked bad in your eyes that night, but did you stop to consider that he's still very childish?

— Mister Micawber

  • Too formal, trying to squeeze too much into one sentence.
  • Haven't you already mentioned the incident in the preceding text?
  • If so: Shane may have looked bad in your eyes that night, but did you stop to consider that he's still very childish?
  • I mean, a cunning boy like John's son would have been very crafty in that situation, but Shane wasn't even careful.
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Too formal, trying to squeeze too much into one sentence. Haven't you already mentioned the incident in the preceding text? If so:


Shane may have looked bad in your eyes that night, but did you stop to consider that he's still very childish? I mean, a cunning boy like John's son would have been very crafty in that situation, but Shane w
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