Syntax of the sentences

Hello guys. Happy New Year!

I would like to thank you a lot for a help in my last post with checking syntax for the game I am making. I have few more sentences. If someone can spare some time to have a look at them and tell me where I can improve them that would be fantastic. Again words written in bold are own names. The font that I am using does not differentiate between small and capital letters so that is not so important. Cheers! So here they are:

The idea behind the "The Watch - Midnight Bronx" is something completely new, I love it"

"New York needs you! Al Carpone's mobsters are getting ready to swipe the cars in the area on a massive scale!"

"To learn fundamentals of the game follow this quick tutorial. Press "Continue" to learn about the interface."

"And last but not least, this is your public trust meter. Keep an eye on it!"

"Now press "Continue" and find Disobedient Diego. He used to work for Al Carpone and he is more than happy to tell you few things to make it easier for you!"

"pssst... Hi, My name is Diego. I used to work for Al Carpone, but not anymore. He needs to be stopped. I can help you to thwart his plans."

"Meet me in the alley behind this hotel. Just east of here. Check your maps if you can't find me. I have marked myself with a green dot on your map.
A dopo..."

"We need to keep moving, Al's mobsters are on to me. I have seen how you have chased away that car thief earlier on. This was Carpone's man. More will come. Let's move on, meet me in the next alley."

"Look there! Looks like those two are up to something! I know them, it is Jumpy Jimmy and Sticky Stefano. You know what to do. Get close to them and use your torch to scare them away! I will wait in the alley across the street."

"Well done. I have not seen someone run so fast in a long time. Your presence will scare them but, nothing works better than that torch of yours. Follow me around the building, I will show you something."

"What are you waiting for??? Any moment now they will start breaking into that car. I thought you want to stop them! Get back to the carpark now."

"Ahhh there you are. Hurry, I don't have a whole night. Follow me to the top of the building. This way, through the door and upstairs."

"By now Carpone knows of your existence. His informants will be watching for you. If you stick to the roofs, they won't know where you are, and they will be more cautious. On the streets, you will be spotted within seconds and Al's thugs will speed up their efforts!"

"Nice view, I know, but we need to hurry, and you need to follow me. We can use those... Look! Another Soldato. He is breaking in already. Run downstairs and chase him away! I will wait here."

"Mamma Mia! We need to hurry. Two thugs that you have chased away before were only thinking about breaking into the car, this guy was already at it. Bit of training and you will learn to spot the difference quickly."

"What are you waiting for??? Run down and get him before it is too late. I can't help you. Go, go, go !"

"Now I am sure, Carpone got all his men on the streets and police is doing nothing about it. He bribed NY's City Police Commissioner and he will steal all the cars tonight. He was talking about it for months. I have never thought he was serious about it!"

"As you can see there is plenty of stairwells around for you to use. Come, come. We can't stop now."

"Trovato! Look, if your torch is low on battery you can charge it up quickly here. There are few spots like this around. You will find them..."

"Ohh what is that? Noo, not that. That's just another stairwell, silly you! There, on the ground, it is a spare battery for your torch. How lucky is that, looks like you are running low as well. Pick it up let's go."

"Nice jump, now let's move quietly. I think I've heard something."

"Wow! That was bright! Flash like this will scare away all of Carpone's punny servants! There was Capo with them as well. Did you see him? That was that huge guy, normally they won't scare so easily. Now jump down with me."

"Bingo. Look down there. Al's men are there. Hey, a flash bomb! What a luck! It is silent but the light is all we need. Activate it now. I will wait here."

"Stop here for a second. See this billboard? My cousin Steve works for them. He says that they are going to be big soon! And Steve never lied to me! We are almost finished, let's head towards the Tremont Park."

"Look at this ride on the roadside. That doesn't look good. Now I will explain to you how Al's men work when they steal cars. Let's get closer."

"So... They will come usually in four stages, first they will break a glass and, come back shortly, steal the radio, then if all is good and no one has seen them, they will come back again to break the ignition. Fourth and final stage is a steal. Sometimes you will see big Capos. They are skilled enough to steal any car in just one go! "

"Let's stop here. I need to leave the city for a while. Hope you can do more than I did to help the people. Remember:

-protect the cars,

-keep an eye on your battery,

-stay on the roofs,

and don't forget about the public trust! If people don't support you, there will be nothing standing between corrupted cops and you! Help the neighborhood. Arrivederci!"

"When Gloie is present at your side, both your Public Trust and your torch battery will increase slightly faster"

"When minimap is on, your battery is recharging a little bit slower."

"With Underboss present in the area, your torch battery will not charge up properly. Get rid of him fast!"

"Yellow exclamation point next to the Public Trust meter means that The Meddler is back in the hood. Find him quick! "

Few more short sentences that are just explaining user interface, they are stand-alone:

"This is the camera zoom in and out slider"

"And this is your movement joystick"

"This is current and max battery charge"

"This is the jump button"

"This is torch joystick and switch in one"

Thanks a lot for your help ladies and gentelmen !

Regards

Steve

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