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Mishau Posted 22 years ago
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Sweet Life of Celebrities. Would you please glance over it?

Sweet Life of Celebrities

Gloss and shine coming out from almost all eminent people are at the same time the obstacles, which do not allow us to see the stars closer. It is only this is the reason for appearance of a lot of prejudges and mistakes connected with the life of celebrities. It is typical to regard the stars to live in clover. In reality, their life is not so fairy as we are used to think of.

In fact, their live is both banal routine and great attempts to avoid it. We know any work to bring joy if we have inspiration. However, it is very hard to be happy if making recording of only one song takes you 2-3 months and making a film episode forces you to go through about 15 duplicates. Besides, such a job assumes you to communicate with people who regard you to be not the star, but only a business partner, that collision of ambitions frequently happens to. An endless number of stresses are as much a part of this job as paparazzi always trying to research your private life. Therefore, the passion of many actors and musicians to alcohol or drugs is not a rock-n-roll, easy-going life, but a simple desire to hide a grief by drinking. We know a lot of cases of running away from such tiresome reality.
The celebrity’s job brings good benefit accompanied by depleting nervous shocks and exhausting people's attention.

One of the most important reasons which make people keep an eye on everything that happens to celebrities is their marvelous life: expensive cloths, restaurants, splendid cars, villas and castles, swimming pools. Lavish costumes, that we pay most of our attention to, have become the object of our worshiping. Ceremonies of rewarding and a lot of festivals have turned into the parades of toilettes. All of the parties collecting eminent persons are no other, but a fair of vanity and a firework of arrogance, which is a very good business for designers and modelers. Nevertheless, few of us know that all the five-million-dollar dresses demonstrated at greatest receptions indeed do not belong to their wearers. They hire the dresses because they cannot afford them earning half a million dollars for each role.

Revelry, singing, dancing, smiling are now the usual environment of any presentations or club parties or something where we can see a lot of celebrities. This cannot avoid attention of the media which always informs us who has raised a new scandal or who has split up; and looking at this, we think that eminent life is a dream for those who want to become popular.


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Sweet Life of Celebrities Gloss and shine coming out from almost all eminent people are at the same time the obstacles, which do not allow us to see the stars closer. It is only this is the reason for appearance of a lot of prejudges and mistakes connected with the life of celebrities. It is typical to regard the stars to live in clover.

  • Sweet Life of Celebrities Gloss and shine coming out from almost all eminent people are at the same time the obstacles, which do not allow us to see the stars closer.
  • It is only this is the reason for appearance of a lot of prejudges and mistakes connected with the life of celebrities.
  • It is typical to regard the stars to live in clover.
  • In reality, their life is not so fairy as we are used to think of.
  • In fact, their live is both banal routine and great attempts to avoid it.
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Sweet Life of Celebrities

Gloss and shine coming out from almost all eminent people are at the same time the obstacles, which do not allow us to see the stars closer. It is only this is the reason for appearance of a lot of prejudges and mistakes connected with the life of celebrities. It is typical to regard the stars to live in clover. In reality, their life is not so
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Thank you, MountainHiker. I find it to be very nice that there are only a few awkward parts in my essay, becuase writing on this topic was very hard for me as I have no opinoin about such a theme indeed. Nevertheless, this practice represents my gaps of knoledge in a bright light, which will give me a good chance to write better on issues I really want to.


The celebrity’s job bri
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Hi Mishau,
The celebrity’s job brings good incomes, which are, alas, accompanied by nervous exhaustion from dealing with the managers, on one hand, and by wasting attantion from the direction of ordinary people on the other.


That's a whopper of a sentence. If it were me, I would simply try to break things up a little bit.

A celebrity's job earns
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Hi, MountainHiker. Thank you for your comments, they have given me some new idea and before I begin a revision of my essay, would you please answer another important for me question?

[1] [2] An endless number of stresses are as much a part of this job as paparazzi [are] always trying to research your private life.

I'm not exclude I can be mistaken. Your correction turns this
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mishau,

You have raised a couple points, so let's go through them.

Original:

An endless number of stresses are as much a part of this job as paparazzi always trying to research your private life.

Modified:

An endless number of stresses are as much a part of this job as paparazzi [are] always trying to research your private life.
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Hello, MountainHiker,
Thank you for your last comments. I decided that the best way to use complex grammar structures is not to use them at all, but it doesn't prove easy
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Sweet Life of Celebrities

Gloss and shine coming out from almost all eminent people are at the same time the obstacles that do not leave any chances for us to realize what the stars are like indeed. [This first sentence is very awkward. You have to follow the sentence very carefully to see what you are trying to say.] Seeing only one [what?], light-headed part of their lives may be a
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Hello MountainHiker. Thank you very much indeed. I have worked at the all mistakes in my essay and I'm going to write a new one.

As for expressions I use, I come across them now and then reading on-line newspapers and books. For example,

to live in clover
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There is no easy way to learn expressions other than reading a lot of English books etc., and speaking with native English speakers.

You have to be careful and not use unfamiliar expressions too much. One per essay is okay, but when you go beyond that, it begins to sound awkward. I used "peaches and cream" and that is okay ONCE. If I then used a few more "expressions" it would sound
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Thank you for your recomendation, MountainHiker. I will take it into consideration.

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