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Essay & Composition Writing
Supply of gold
I am trying to discuss the gold market change. If you see any mistakes in the following sentences, can I have your comments?
Supposing that half of the gold mines were damaged due to an earthquake and the demand for jewerly increased suddenly, gold price will surely increase. In the short run, the increased gold price will lead more firms to enter the gold market for more gains( or proficients). However, substitue such as silver can be used instead of gold. In such respect, in the long run, the gold price will decline and it will go back to its previous price before the eaqrhquake occurred.
Supposing that half of the gold mines were damaged due to an earthquake and the demand for jewerly increased suddenly, gold price will surely increase. In the short run, the increased gold price will lead more firms to enter the gold market for more gains( or proficients). However, substitue such as silver can be used instead of gold. In such respect, in the long run, the gold price will decline and it will go back to its previous price before the eaqrhquake occurred.
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Line 1: Okay Line 2: the first "gold price" should be made plural. the second "gold price" is fine as it is. Line 3: "( or proficients)" should be changed to "(or profits)".
- Line 1: Okay Line 2: the first "gold price" should be made plural.
- the second "gold price" is fine as it is.
- Line 3: "( or proficients)" should be changed to "(or profits)".
- "substitue" should be changed to "substitutes".
- Line 4: Just write "In the long run"; get rid of "In such a respect".
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Line 1: Okay
Line 2: the first "gold price" should be made plural. the second "gold price" is fine as it is.
Line 3: "( or proficients)" should be changed to "(or profits)". "substitue" should be changed to "substitutes".
Line 4: Just write "In the long run"; get rid of "In such a respect". "eaqrhquake" should be "earthquake".
Line 2: the first "gold price" should be made plural. the second "gold price" is fine as it is.
Line 3: "( or proficients)" should be changed to "(or profits)". "substitue" should be changed to "substitutes".
Line 4: Just write "In the long run"; get rid of "In such a respect". "eaqrhquake" should be "earthquake".
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