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Sunipau Posted 15 years ago
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Reference our discussion with Alistair of ABC, we confirmed to supply bilgtong to the XYZ outlets. Also agreed to launch the product from 1st may 2011 to XYZ outlets.
We confirm the product to be supplied under our vendor code. Pls find attached the barcode and the price list of the same and incorporate to your system to enable us to supply to the outlets.
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Hi, This reads like a telegram in which each word costs you $100, so you are trying to reduce the numnber of words. Here is better English. In our discussion with Alistair of ABC, we confirmed that we would supplyy bilgtong to the XYZ outlets, and agreed to launch the product on 1 st May.

  • Hi, This reads like a telegram in which each word costs you $100, so you are trying to reduce the numnber of words.
  • Here is better English.
  • In our discussion with Alistair of ABC, we confirmed that we would supplyy bilgtong to the XYZ outlets, and agreed to launch the product on 1 st May.
  • We confirm the product will be supplied under our vendor code.
  • Attached is the barcode and the price list.
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Hi,

This reads like a telegram in which each word costs you $100, so you are trying to reduce the numnber of words.

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