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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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Hi, can someone help me correct the writing below if there is any mistake?
Short summary
After getting his family invisible guardian, Atif meets Zul, another teenager who as well has a guardian, but is thirsty of power. Atif must stop him before he conquers all guardians or even humans.
Long summary
Atif has been inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same. Completely opposite of Atif, Zul thirsts for power, and he has conquered other guardians to be stronger. Atif is afraid that Zul will aim for humans next, and he tries to stop him. During the fight, however, Atif loses his guardian to Zul, leaving him to struggle to stop Zul, who by now, has turned even more power-thirsty.
Short summary
After getting his family invisible guardian, Atif meets Zul, another teenager who as well has a guardian, but is thirsty of power. Atif must stop him before he conquers all guardians or even humans.
Long summary
Atif has been inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same. Completely opposite of Atif, Zul thirsts for power, and he has conquered other guardians to be stronger. Atif is afraid that Zul will aim for humans next, and he tries to stop him. During the fight, however, Atif loses his guardian to Zul, leaving him to struggle to stop Zul, who by now, has turned even more power-thirsty.
Top answer
" Long summary Atif has inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same. Your error was putting "Atif has been inherited" in the passive. It doesn't work because you are saying that Atif was inherited by someone, which really isn't possible.
- " Long summary Atif has inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same.
- Your error was putting "Atif has been inherited" in the passive.
- It doesn't work because you are saying that Atif was inherited by someone, which really isn't possible.
- The guardian was inherited by Atif.
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Below, you will find my corrections:
"...but is thirsty for power."
Long summary
Atif has inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same.
Your error was putting "Atif has been inherited" in the passive. It doesn't work because you are saying that Atif was inherited by someone, which really isn't pos
"...but is thirsty for power."
Long summary
Atif has inherited an invisible guardian from his family, and soon, he meets Zul, another teenager who has just had the same.
Your error was putting "Atif has been inherited" in the passive. It doesn't work because you are saying that Atif was inherited by someone, which really isn't pos
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Ok thank you for your correction Sir. This is really very helpful to me.
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