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Hi can anyone check the below writing and please let me know if there's any grammatical error. Thank you.
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job, however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fail life, and decides to change her understanding in emphasizing the importance of education by enrolling in a school, as a student.
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job, however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fail life, and decides to change her understanding in emphasizing the importance of education by enrolling in a school, as a student.
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I have underlined the problem areas: As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future j ob, how ever, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fail life, and decides to change her understanding in emphasizing the importance of education by enrolling in a scho ol, as a student.
- I have underlined the problem areas: As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu.
- Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future j ob, how ever, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education.
- Chandra worries that Abu will fail life, and decides to change her understanding in emphasizing the importance of education by enrolling in a scho ol, as a student.
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I have underlined the problem areas:
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job, however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fa
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education for her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job, however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fa
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Thank you. And I have fixed the problem areas. Please take a look.
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to provide her daughter with a good education. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good job in the future, but her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries about her
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to provide her daughter with a good education. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good job in the future, but her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries about her
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That's good. You did not directly fix the problems I indicated, but your rephrasings are better choices.
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Thank you. By the way, I have tried to fix the problem you have indicated initially, please take a look.
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education to her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job in her life, however, her daughter, unfortunat
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education to her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good future job in her life, however, her daughter, unfortunat
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This is what I had in mind:
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education to her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good job in the future; however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fail in her life, a
As a courageous mother who fights hard to fulfil her dreams, Chandra, a maid, has only one aim in life: to give the best education to her daughter, Abu. Like every parent, she wishes for her daughter to have a good job in the future; however, her daughter, unfortunately, shows no interest in education. Chandra worries that Abu will fail in her life, a
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Ok. thank you. But I think the rephrasing one sounds good to me. I will go for that. Thanks once again.
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