Apart from the missing capital letter at the start, your sentence is formally correct. However, the structure has a literary or poetic flavour that does not seem suitable for modern everyday communication. "
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Cliveeg Can I receive a certificate if I live in Iran?Oh yeah, that is a bit simpler!
GPYOh yeah, that is a bit simpler!It is indeed, but I think your version catches the tone of the original better. Merely my personal opinion.