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I've been working on this sentence for hours and am stil not sure if its correctly constructed. It sounds somewhat unnatural to me and yet this is exactly what i want to say. Could someone suggest me a better way to reconstruct this sentence?

"My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities. From confronting with member’s complaints to resolving the complaint as much as possible, to finally strengthen the relationship between the company and the members. This was the main role as an Public Relations Exe in the company"

Thanks

Rvw · Accepted Answer

What I noticed is that your middle "sentence" is not actually a sentence, so I would reword that. Also, you changed from "customers" to "members."

My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities. I received customers’ complaints, resolved those complaints as much as possible, and finally strengthened the relationships between the company and the customers. Those were my main functions as a public relations executive in the company.

Joeviee · Answer

Thank you very much rvw. In your post, you said that my "sentence" is not actually a sentence. I do agree with you. But i have seen people using this kind of writing style in their essay. And i remember this particular well as in school teacher would encourage student to try different ways of writing a sentence as to prevent the whole essay sounds flat & uninteresting. My point here is, is there any way to reconstruct my sentence without changing its pattern. As in "From (+)ing............., to (+ )ing............., and to ( +)ing, ...............". Combine all three simple sentence(or more) into a compound sentence without changing the meaning.

Any help would appreciated:)

Thanks.

Rvw · Answer

You could put a dash or a colon after "activities" and then list those activities in "---ing" form.

My role in this company encompassed a wide range of customer-oriented activities -- receiving customers’ complaints, resolving those complaints as much as possible, and finally strengthening the relationships between the company and the customers. Those were my main functions as a public relations executive in the company.

Joeviee · Answer

Thanks rvm. You are very close to that, but what if i insisit on using this form: From (+)ing............., to (+ )ing............., and to ( +)ing, ...............". Is that possible?

You might want to use other sentense to illustrate the above.

Rvw · Answer

It depends on your level of formality.  Strictly speaking, three prepositional phrases do not make a sentence.  In a novel, artistic license would allow it.  But in an essay, I don't think it is acceptable.

Joeviee · Answer

So did mean in my first sentence it is not wrong but perhaps less formal?

Rvw · Answer

Yes. That is how I view it.  Others may see it differently.

Joeviee · Answer

okie thanks....

I would like to see what others think about this?

BarbaraPA · Answer

The style of your writing will depend on your audience and what you want them to do after reading it.

For example, if your audience a potential future employer, and your goal is for them to want to hire you, I would suggest you be very formal and use the construction that has been suggested.

Anyway, let us know who you want to read this, and what you want your audience to think/do/know, and we can give a better opinion.

Joeviee · Answer

Thanks G.Geek.

You are right, perhaps i did a mistake by not indicating that this is part of the resume. And you've just reminded me about being formal in writing if the audience a potential future employer....

Guess i need to reconstruct my whole resume..........

Thanks to all the replies~

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